Forbidden Love

When God's son and Satan's daughter fall in love...

Child of Sin,
Child of God,
Forbidden Love,
A Story quite odd.

She's Satan's daughter,
A child of sin,
And though hated by God,
She's loved by his kin.

The Lord's second son,
A child of God.
Raised by the angels,
A kind and caring demigod.

She climbed upward from hell,
And from heaven he fell,
To meet on the earth,
And be caught in love's spell.

Though it didn't last long,
Til' along came the father,
To take home his son,
And send home Satan's daughter.

Two broken hearted children,
One disaproving father,
And it does seem quite odd,
That God's son loved Satan's daughter.

And Satan, he sighed,
As he welcomed home his daughter,
He didn't agree
With her boyfriend's father.

God's son tried again,
and from heaven he fell,
Only this time he didn't stop,
Until he reached hell.

And in hell he was welcomed,
Much to his surprize,
Lovers reunited,
The kids dried their eyes.

And God, he was angery,
His disclaimed his son,
Though the 'sins' he'd comited,
He'd done out of love.

And so nested in hell,
These children were happy,
Though few will retell
This painful love story,

Child of Sin,
Child of God,
Forbidden Love,
A Story quite odd.

Author's Note

idk, i doubt it even makes much sense but... i'd love to know what you think.

Reviews

[*Evelen*]

I really like this story it's very creative and sweet. Well done.

[Zoe]

i like how it tells a story. had a definite picture painted in my mind. loved that she was Satan's daughter. brought everyday situations to an exaggerated stance.

[Wicahpi]

i actually like this story; unique and well versed i think.
a few misspellings: one (disapproving) father,
much to his (surprise), And God, he was (angry), Though
the sins he'd (committed)

Nice flow, too.
Kudos!!

[M O R P H I N E]

I think this is really beautiful. It would really make a good story, that's a fact...but I love it. The rhyming pattern is on spot and the flow just makes you lose yourself in the words. It makes perfect sense and I really enjoyed reading this...thank you for sharing

[Terrestrial.42]

This is really cool, it definitely makes sense.

A few spelling things... "surprise", and "comitted".

Other than that, super well-written... this would make a really good short story, although the way you put it into verse gives it a poignant feel.

[LittleMadGirl]

I does make sense and it's so ironic that the big bad evil satan gives the two lovers a chance to be happy =)
But I think the "chorsus"thing you did was a bit too much. after the third time I just kept scrolling to the next verse^^