Sadness

MIght be triggering

Sadness.

An unknown step

A dark abyss

Never-ending hole

Is it emptiness or sadness

How do you feel alone within a crowd?

I sit on the leather couch

Rubbing my cut-up thighs

"It's just temporary," they say

Knife shaking in hand

Mind flashing back to my friend

Maybe this too shall pass.

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

The mind is a powerful thing. Your poem screams with emotion. It makes me think of my granddaughter and her ghosts that haunt her emotions.


I tell her yesterday is set in stone and can't be changed, but what gives us power is how we see it handle the fallout from it, and filter it through our emotions.
There are so many who hurt in silence, proving they still live with pain.
They need someone to tell them it will get better and you are stronger than your pain.

You can do that with simple heartfelt words. Keep writing and sharing.

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

The lines are crisp yet biting!!!
You paint a very poignant picture of loneliness
...even in a crowd!
Depression is real...unfortunately many people are screaming inside and hurting.
This is priceless!

[Miss Sharon]

A very emotion filled write. (How do you feel alone within a crowd?) I too have felt this way many times. ~Sharon

[Patricia]

very powerful poetry, raw, honest, painful, I remember being your age, that is if you are still 13, that was THE most worst of year of my young life and I feel your pain. I'm considerably older now and managed to survive it and many other trials and mostly because of poetry and the kindness of a stranger here or there. stay strong, keep writing and sharing!

[Shambhavi]

Powerful poem... I could feel the emotions

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful poem well written.

[VelvetPotato]

Sadness feels like an eternity. But all I have to say to the young people is to give your brain time to mature. There is so much angst and confusion being a teenager. But ride it out, get help if needed, and know that emotions start to stabilize, and it gets better.

[barleygirl]

Sorry I haven't seen you at the cafe, but I understand you're living a young, tangled, busy life! I hope your new year is unfolding without too much weirdness. This is one of the best poems of yours I've read. This is the poster child for SHOW instead of tell. Here you give us little glimpses of a scene, but also you let the reader have some space to put these pieces together in whichever way the reader sees it. I'm seeing some troubled person who's cutting to relieve anxiety & trying to minimize everything by saying it will be okay in a while. Your poem conveys profound sadness while at the same time trying to minimize everything that points to this sadness (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay/Hayden]

Thanks so much for the review! The truth is, ive had so much free time. Ive just been struggling with my own thoughts. Ive had my fair share of mental issues and it's just sorta relapsing I guess. I hope I get back to my normal self soon so I can become active again soon! -Kay