Going Under

Trapped in a bathtub or imagination?

I watch as the water corners my shoulders and slowly creeps up my neck. I feel my lungs loose air, it's such a bare to stay afloat. The chains narrow around my wrists. My chest feels like an arrow drove through it. I try to squint my eyes to read the tiny print on the wall across the blank room. “It’s okay Max, just calm down. You're just in the surgery room. Your anesthesia didn’t work,” a distant voice said.I feel a prick in my arm, then my body sinks into the darkness of a mattress.

Reviews

[Courtney Hough]

This is my biggest fear! I also fear dreams from going under. It’s such a weird experience isn’t it? A way to understand what death my feel like I guess. I really like this!

[Kay/Hayden]

Thanks so much, Courtney! Always love your poems!

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of description. You made the reader feel and understand the place you were in. Thank you Kay/Hayden for sharing the amazing poem.
Coyote

[Kay/Hayden]

Thanks so much for the feedback!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Kay/Hayden.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I agree with Laz. Would like the story of happened before and after.
I remember the last time I was put to sleep for a surgery...I started counting backward and knew afterward the exact number and moment I went under...I could feel myself going and saying to myself, here I go.
But how awful that feeling if it doesn't work...a stream of consciousness about losing consciousness.
j.

[Kay/Hayden]

Ya I could not imagine, thank you for the feedback! Got inspiration for this poem from my own foot surgery.

[barleygirl]

This reminds me of when I got stuffed into a huge noisy magnetic resonance tube, to catch an image prior to neck surgery. I'm not scared of much, but that was scary & at the same time I summoned superhuman control to keep from freaking out. Whenever I feel like I'm freaking out, I think back to being crammed in a cold screaming tube & I know I can do anything, forevermore. Your description is similar to that kind of freaking out & trying to stay in control, that we find in a million different kinds of life situations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay/Hayden]

Thanks for taking the time to review! Love, Kay

[Laz K.]

Nice use of descriptive details and dialogue. You could extend this and turn it into a short story. What happens later? What happened before?
Good job, keep it up!