Remember Me

the temptations too strong

gotta mind of violence

tell me where'd i go wrong

before my life is silenced

too much pain in my brain 

make it hard to breathe

my energies so drained

got me looking seethed

what am i to do

i have nothing left

so i snort another blue

hope it bring my death

i can't rest

is there a place where i can be

so humble and free

life here's not meant for me

that's what i can see

so when i'm gone

just carry on

i'll be in your memories

when you feeling down

i'll be around

in our comemories

Reviews

[Trigorin]

I like that term you've just coined, 'comemories'. I feel like it might work better with a dash, but that's up to you. This piece has a very staccato rhythm to it, and while I personally don't like that very much, it does get your message across. Well done.