My Life Ain't a Life

I live in this life that ain't a life
With friends that ain't friends
With a family that ain't family
With people who ain't people
Nothing is real
It's all fake
My life is just a movie
As I watch it pass me by
I watch everything fall apart
Right infront of my eyes
Everything fails
There is nothing that I could ever do to fix anything
I am falling into the darkness
But nobody notices
Nobody can save me
I am left here a person who is not really a person
But the shattered remains of what used to exist
But what is now dead
I lay slowly dying in my life that ain't a life

Reviews

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very interesting. I think poetry is a great outlet for a lot of people.

[kayamon215]

thanks :)

[Kenya Smith]

Dark and deep..i love that in a poem :)

[kayamon215]

thank you :)

[Kenya Smith]

you're welcome :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

I really like this poem, it's very dark and negative... and I like that in poetry, haha, I just feel like there's more meaning in it :) You can really tell, from reading it, what's going through the writer's head, it's very emotional. Really well done...really :)

[kayamon215]

thank you so much :)

[Salar Majak]

awww i'm so sorry that you feel that way, but just remember that even this fake life can become real if you make it worth living! you CAN make it worth! you CAN make it count! you just need to find your PASSION and believe me it WILL save you and carry you through rough times.
please don't give up!

[kayamon215]

i wont :)

[Salar Majak]

:)

[daydreamer]

Good poem would have been better without the word ain't. Call me old fashioned in my writing but I think that in this poem it hurts the poem. It really depreciates the value and content that you're trying to put in.

[StarlaFireDelta]

Im so very impressed w your writing , if you have a twitter ,good start adding record labels, pr agents ..make sure u have songwritter under your title .
tweet small examples of ur work .. do it player

[kayamon215]

haha i don't use twitter though could i do that on fb?

[Holly Mason]

I am southern and ain't is in my vocab just moved north trying hard to figure out the wicked thing differences make the world interesting thanks for the write

[eglantine]

I'm sorry but I just really don't like the word "ain't" Call me prudish but, tiz what it is lol

[paperdaydreams]

something i think everyone feels at times is the topic of this poem and so i really like it because i can relate to it. The irregular pattern and line lengths add to the broken feel behind the poem

[Lizzie Mitchell]

i understand you completely

[kayamon215]

ims ad to hear you say that :( but im glad someone does

[kayamon215]

*sad