A Storm's Coming

Thunder booms,

Lightning cracks,

The rain falls down.

Mummy runs,

Baby cries,

A home dies.

All around,

All that can be heard,

Is an echoing scream.

This scream does not escape,

From the mouths of babes,

Rather the full grown mind,

Of a man gone mad.

Author's Note

Just in case you did not understand this poem, here is what I was trying to portray: The very last line shows what kind of storm it is, it's a storm of the mad. The mentally dysfunctional. The ones who would do anything to get what they crave, what they must have to sustain their life. But what they crave is not what they truly need, what they need is people around them to help, then the mad would no longer be just that. Simply put, what they want/crave/think they need, could kill them in the end. The man in my poem screams out like a babe for he has been deprived of what he feels he needs, though it is for his own good, he cannot just stand around and listen to what those around him say. The whole poem truly is centered around the very last line. The storm outside the house symbolizes the man's pain, not the mention the dysfunction he has brought upon his family. The mother running is trying to get away from the man whom she once knew, who she once loved. The baby crying is terrified of what his/her father may do, it has never seen this side of him. The child is young, and scared of what is before him/her. The home dying is a symbolization of what the man has done to his family, his house is no longer a home, the family has been torn apart, and it will never be the same again. The scream echoing around is not for the physical ear to hear, it is a scream only this family can hear, because they are at the center of this horror story, the man gone insane has screamed, and that scream will echo around the minds of his wife and child for the rest of their lives. Though this poem is quite short, I hoped to portray quite a bit of emotion and meaning into it.

Reviews

[rainbow princess]

It's a good poem, sends a strong message not just that it can go well for a beginning of another novel as a short author's note!

[Silently waiting]

Thank you very much (:

[Relic]

Great poem and author's note.

[Silently waiting]

Thank you :)

[Relic]

You're welcome.

[zainul]

You have vividly depicted the special kind of storm.
It is very meaningful.
Such storms happen everywhere in the world.
Many families are shattered by such rude storms.
Your detailed explanation is a great help for the realization of the situation.

[Silently waiting]

Thank you for your review, and I'm glad you liked the poem :)
It's sad how often this kind of storm happened, I actually wrote this poem during one of the worse ones in my family...
I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this.

[zainul]

You are most welcome,dear poet :)
Your poem gives comfort by releasing the agony,anger and frustration.
I adore your love to your family.

[Silently waiting]

Well once again, thank you :)

[Hypnos]

i knew praying to Zeus for a storm would work!

[Silently waiting]

*Sigh* It's not meant to be /that/ kind of storm... Read the Writers Note... I explain everything there :)

[Hypnos]

i understood the poem but took it in a literal sense.

[Silently waiting]

It sounds more like you took the title of the poem in a literal sense.

[Hypnos]

i did, because i felt like it.

[Silently waiting]

Hmm, sounds like you :P