Lilies

Everything died when you left.

I’m breathing in the air you left behind.
The back yard filled with weeds and crows.
The kitchen piling up, way up high.
But still the door has not yet been closed.

In my dreams I see the sun
And lilies and roses and green life.
Your face still smiling at me as it always has,
My finger shining bright,  your perfect little wife.

The seams have now been closed shut.
The hallways black and not a whisper heard.
My loneliness boiling up my broken heart.
But I’m the forgotten one, Mrs. Deferred.

Withering gardens and overgrown hedges.
You left me alone with so much work.
While your out playing with dirty cats,
I’m still looking at what’s missing, you lifeless jerk.

You drove my smile away, the shine in my brown eyes.
Your tooth brush still on the bathroom sink.
The smell of the roses flushed away by the storms.
When will the lilies come back, when do you think?

Author's Note

Tell me what you think..how does this poem make you feel?

Reviews

[River Wilson]

Haunting

[bluessadmood]

I tell you this is so nice Kati..as always ,only feels so sad ..
you draw a black picture of loneliness after he left that you breathe the foul air
everything is piled up nothing moves and no sound but still the door is open
loneliness piling up on a broken heart gardens withering and ever growing hedges
he left so much work and so little hope behind to go and play with his dirty cats
you drove away my smiles and the shine in my eyes
i dont smell any roses no more,will they ever come back again
what lovely pictures and images you draw of despair
but there could still be hope..lillies could always grow again
lovely write..

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

this is really scenery and metaphorical about the person and the spirit

[CD]

I really like the last stanza. The poem made me feel sad,and it portrays feelings of resentment and bitterness. You know how to put your emotions into poetry very well :) good work

[Lizza543]

Wow. Really powerful, just plain real. It made my heart sink to the bottom(in a good way) very emotional writing. Great job! :)