All The Way To The Bone

He still is a part of me..

You've been gone for quite a while now
I have no idea where you went
But thinking about you and your life
Leaves me in pain and completely bent.

You had a great face with a happy smile
Making every soul in the room have a laugh
With your presence missing everything went silent
And left me shredded into a worthless half.

You had the inspiration in the soul
That would lead me to be better, succeed
Now that your gone so is the motivation
Without your hand to hold I must recede.

I was your angel, the light in your eyes
But it wasn't enough to save your precious life
I wish I would have been older, to try and help
To take away the pain, the anger, the strife.

But It was all too late for anyone to try
You were way gone before a soul even knew
If only I could have stopped you, found you
But asleep you fell and away your life blew.

The pain will swim in my mind forever
Because I have more of you in me then my own
We were two peas in a pod, you and I
And your still part of me, all the way to the bone.

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

oh Katie what nice words..full of emotion..God how sweet
You've been gone for quite a while now
I have no idea where you went
But thinking about you and your life
Leaves me in pain and completely bent..such love ..emotion you dont see these days
lucky is the guy to have such a wonderful sweet soul by his side
With your presence missing everything went silent
And left me shredded into a worthless half..no dear you are worth a lot with or without him
these words i am reading now..the best proof to a great soul and a great talent
You had the inspiration in the soul
That would lead me to be better, succeed
Now that your gone so is the motivation
Without your hand to hold I must recede..he may be the inspiration to you..your help in need
but you will make it and succeed ..that i know with no doubt at all
I was your angel, the light in your eyes
But it wasn't enough to save your precious life
I wish I would have been older, to try and help
To take away the pain, the anger, the strife..how sweet ..i swear i read those words so many many times
i wanted to memorize the engulfing emotions everywhere..what tenderness of soul
But It was all too late for anyone to try
You were way gone before a soul even knew
If only I could have stopped you, found you
But asleep you fell and away your life blew..here i will not comment..if i was him i would rush to you
for i dont think there is any place sweeter.
The pain will swim in my mind forever
Because I have more of you in me then my own
We were two peas in a pod, you and I
And your still part of me, all the way to the bone..what magic you say ..you will take his pain
to be part of you as you say you two are one soul..he is part of you..all the way to he bone ..sorry for the long review..but i swear i loved those words..so close to my heart ..they are made of gold..magic i see here..true lovely and sweet magician and poet you are .....
best thing i ever read in months..i swear

[Last Lying Look]

This is very beautiful.
Sad yet soothing.
I really like this.
Great write.

-Elissa

[Wondering Mind]

Nicely expressed with wonderful flow full of emotion.

Dear Kati
First, let me say one of my favorite lines about writers:
"The only rule: Writers write. Everything else is a guideline."

With this in mind, I want to say that I think this title is incredible and the fact that you held on to it until the last line is brilliant. Also, the use of the word "swim" in the last verse is exactly how this feels! The only else I can add is that sometimes what we say is more powerful with less words. Read your writing and try to identify the deadwood.

Thanks for reviewing "Africa." Happy writing. Hattie

[Butterflymom]

This was so beautiful, intense, emotional, and well expressed. Thank you for sharing this awesome piece.
Blessings, peace, love, and light to you.
Namaste',
Butterflymom