Cobwebs

If hes a spider, I'm a spider

You know how much i hate spiders
But to be with you would capture my heart
If that was what you are then that is what I'd be with
Because nothing in this world can keep us apart

I would last with you forever
Or untill we would be squashed
Because we arent one without the other
Unless we are single handedly brainwashed.

But I will linger with you untill the end
For we are well past our subdebs
I will style with you the fanciest home
Sitting in our luxorious cobwebs.

We will eat the tastiest bugs we can catch
At any time of the everlong day
For we will be nocturnal in our loveliness
And feed on our harmless prey.

But I don't mind living this lifestyle
As long as I'm with you in our cred
For we will dance with our eight limbs
chanted with our pearly white cobwebs.

Reviews

[Pamela A. Lamppa]

"Because we arent one without the other
Unless we are single handedly brainwashed."

These lines stood out for me. I liked the concept set forth in this piece. Watch spelling punctuation and grammar - but beyond that, the ideas are solid and tight. It is what bind love, the sharing of like tings, and the understanding of the other, regardless of enviroment that makes this piece work.

Nice job. ~Pamela

[Jessica M.]

lol
"if he's a spider, I'm a spider"
notebook... quite a romantic
nice write

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very nice. I can't imagine myself as a spider.

[bluessadmood]

oh thats wonderful..you began to sing sweet love songs
those words i found so tender so nice
i could not but see al the love behind it..
But to be with you would capture my heart
If that was what you are then that is what I'd be with
I would last with you forever
Or untill we would be squashed
Because we arent one without the other
will style with you the fanciest home
Sitting in our luxorious cobwebs.
We will eat the tastiest bugs we can catch
At any time of the everlong day
For we will be nocturnal in our loveliness
And feed on our harmless prey.
But I don't mind living this lifestyle
For we will dance with our eight limbs
wow ..what words ..how nice all the feelings
i see magic here..your words like a song
in that beautiful night..you would mind eat anything ..for you would be nocturnal
in your loveliness ..how sweet ..everything here is so sweet
wonderful

[Arthur Crow]

This is quite a wonderful expression of love - to give be willing to shed human form for a such a wild creature is a true testament of the hearts affection for another. Very good word weaving here, much enjoyed!

[darkgurl]

Excellent write, I hate spiders myself, This is so wonderful, I can feel the story behind this write....Kim