Pushing You On a TightWire

True feelings.

  I am a broken piece of glass
That you step all over with bare feet.
I am a heated curling iron
That you burn yourself with, smoldering heat.

I am the cliff that you jump off of
Because you thought i could take you higher
I am the person that wasnt there to catch you
Because i am nothing but a decietful liar.

I am the pilot on your plane to success
But i dont even know how to fly
I am the reason your still stuck here
When i'm not anywhere close by.

I am the person you turn to for help
When i'm the one secretly causing the problem
I am the one who brought all your tears
And left you lifeless in this terrible bedlam.

I am the coward, the one you shouldnt trust
The person who fuels the fire
I am the one who deserves the cold shoulder
The one who is pushing you on the tightwire.

You deserve to stand tall
With your head high above your shoulders
One day i will live up to a confession
And i will be the one crushed under boulders.

Reviews

[Emily Irene.]

I liked the rhythm in this, actually. My favorite part was:

I am the person you turn to for help
When i'm the one secretly causing the problem
I am the one who brought all your tears
And left you lifeless in this terrible bedlam.

Rhyming bedlam with problem was good. It just barely flows, but you make it by.

And thank you for the review of "Jesus." I try to make my poems as long as I can while still keeping the music in them, so to speak, but most of the time they're short. I may try to stretch that one out, but I would certainly not want to ruin it, yah know.

[bluessadmood]

God the way you love..and what love
if he is hurt you put all the blame on you
have not seen such heavenly love..he is so lucky
I am the broken glass that hurts your feet
you fly off the cliff ..thought i will take you higher
but i was not even there to catch you..i am a liar
i will drive your plane..i do not even know how
i am supposed to help..i am the cause to all troubles
i am the one who brought you tears..left you lifeless...
You deserve to stand tall
With your head high above your shoulders
One day i will live up to a confession
And i will be the one crushed under boulders.
I was really touched with this writing ..i know its the man who should take the blame if something went wrong
but you are so humble and so loving ..you almost claim everything that goes wrong
to be becuase of you..i am really amazed..how you love..it gives me very nice feelings
just wonderful really...

[NeverWonderland]

i really like this i have so much thoughts to say but my fingers stiffen when i go to type. im the same way with puncuation. i know all about it but i dont use good puncuation just because i think im too lazy or somthing i dont know. umm.. and thanks for inviting me to be a part of this group. i literally JUST made this profile and you found me. woot. ill read your stuff and give you what reviews i can sweetheart. i just ask you also give me input =] later.

[Emily Rose]

Wow, this is powerful. I'm a little confused about the random capitalization and lack of apostrophes, though. That bugged me and seemed to bring down the quality of the piece. The rhythm falters a little too, but it's not too bad. Good job!