Dark Vines

Dark Vines

A Poem by Kaotic Barbie
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A little something dark. Suffocating.

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   Pull me down to your tainted black hole
Take me to the broken damned
Cover me in your dark vines
Burry me in your endless sand.

I knew i wouldnt make it to clond nine
Not with your breath on my shoulders
Closing in on my freezing white body
Suffocating me in your black smolders.

There is no place for my eyes down here
No where to put my icey hands
I wish i could touch his warm face
And swallow all his mysterious demands.

Looking for a place to climb out
Doesnt seem to be promising
Banging on the empty nothings
Thrusting, cussing and fussing.

I blink and there is white light all around
I didnt want to take this rout
My body wasnt finished on that planet
God couldnt just have cut me out.

I try and take a deep breath
And the enemys have returned
Dark vines cover my body once again
How could he leave me like this, unconcerened

© 2008 Kaotic Barbie


Author's Note

Kaotic Barbie
Do you ever feel like this? Like you were put somewhere un-fairly?

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Hmm, I think that you could work a little bit on grammar, but it's really only a little. But the content...oh, it was great. I wouldn't say amazing because it wasn't, but it was great. Very great. Even on the verge of excellent. Filled with such feeling as well. I know what it feels like to never belong.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very nice... And yes I feel that way right now. Read my work air in my lungs or My heart bleeds.

Very good piece though!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on November 17, 2008

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Kaotic Barbie
Kaotic Barbie

Baltimore, MD



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My name is Kati. I'm 20 years old and live in Baltimore, Maryland "And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. Th.. more..

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