Lost Chapter 1

          I was awoken by screaming and footsteps. I could feel the floor moving on the vast ship. Something wasn't right. I started to feel uneasy as I searched the dining hall and my bedroom for my family, but they were nowhere to be found. I decided to wait for awhile, staring out the tiny window we had in our room and clutching onto my teddy. Several minuted passed and I was getting suspicious. I had to search for them, it was my only chance.

        I opened the door. I tried to balance with the ship rocking over and back. Expensive vases were flying everywhere smashing to pieces on the ground. The hall was empty. The dining hall was packed with people which made me curious. I found a boy sitting on the ground crying, he looked as if he was about 6 or maybe 7. I knew I had to find my family, but this mattered more, I HAD to help him. Or else I would have to put up with the guilt for the rest of my life. I caught his shaking hand and brought him to the dining hall and searched for his family, and unfortunately I was unlucky. So I brought him with me to search for my own parents.

      We started moving around swiftly. I knew we didn't have much time left until the ship turned over or sank. I was surprised to see men were still laughing and drinking as much beer as they possibly could. But I had much more things to worry about. So I headed outside.

      I walked around and someone patted me on the back..
"There you are!!" shouted my brother, " Did you see the waves?!" 
     "Yes, I did. Where is Mam and Dad?.. And why did you leave me?!" I shouted back over the screaming and shouting of the other passengers. 
     " No time for questions. Come with me, we need to get off this ship, now." he said and caught my hand. I wanted to help the little boy find his parents but for now he had to come with us.

Reviews

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

What happens next??? What happened before??? Interested......

[Amy Rose]

What happens next is a secret ;) what happened before was they were on a cruise just going on holiday :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

When will the secret be revealed Amy???

[Amy Rose]

You'll have to wait i'm afraid :D

[RomaJ]

Very intriguing and brilliantly written, I look forward to reading more.

[Amy Rose]

Thank you!
I look forward to your reviews! :D

[Andrew Dane Parker]

I don't know what's going on, but I like the idea so far. However I think it could have been longer. I feel like you jumped around from one place to another too quickly. And there is much detail (don't worry, I struggle with that too), but overall a nice, intriguing start. Keep up the talent, and I would love your opinion and review on my work. Thanks!

[Amy Rose]

Thank you. I know what you mean, I should have made it longer.. I'll try my best to make the nest chapter longer :)

[Andrew Dane Parker]

Your welcome! And just stay true to your vision!

[Woody]

this is very good Amy. a great start. intriguing and I can't wait to read about what's going to happen next. I think a monster will come out of the depth of the sea and swallow the whole ship. No? then the lost boy is really a robot made by the Chinese and wants to marry the little girl. No? ok, I give up :)

[Amy Rose]

Ha ha nah :D But funny, REALLY funny :D Do you want to read through it or will i tell you how it ends ( and you can still read it :D )

[Woody]

nonono you'll spoil the suspense. I'll wait like everybody else. like a serial on TV, you know?

[Amy Rose]

yeah I know ;)