Reaper's Call

Reaper's Call

A Poem by katieg
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who knows, honestly.

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Here I nurse my mind, scarred with incisions.
Vetting this chaos, I helplessly weep,
loathing myself for my thoughtless actions,
my rues, from crevasses endlessly sleep.

Here they lie, my deepest thoughts and regrets
for surely, I have sabotaged my life.
comfort, I find in glorious sunsets
at dark, deadly thoughts in my mind run rife.

Someone said youth is the hope of tomorrow.
Contrarily, we are grim’s reflection.
To our roots we offer absolute sorrow,
for we’re harbingers of life’s destruction

Upon me, I have brought my own downfall.
at all, I might answer the reapers call.

© 2016 katieg


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Sorrowful and heavy. I like it!

You chose your vocabulary well, and I'm always glad to see uncommon words get to stretch their legs.

You, unlike many, managed to stick with a rhyming scheme. Something to be proud of for sure.

In your second verse, the use of sunset imagery implies gathering darkness already, so you could remove "at dark" and simply begin that line with "deadly thoughts", and it would work a bit better.

Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Most of the mistakes we make are not the end of the world, although I've done my share of obsessing over my own choices in the dead of night (I'm so sorry to my 2nd grade teacher, Ms. Harrington, I didn't mean all those mean things I said). Joking aside, our pain can be our teacher, and instruct us on how to behave in the future. It's the only way we become better people. My experience is, don't beat yourself up too much, the world will do that for you.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very interesting! The title itself has something to tell. I think the choice of words are fabulous, to create a greater impact in the poem. A mind speaking of past mistakes and thinking deep thoughts about life regretting and feeling upset. There is a melancholic feel in it yet a mysterious feeling too...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


katieg

7 Years Ago

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katieg

tulsa, OK



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