Insanity of Sea

Breath-taking, bone-chilling wind
is a raging wild woman
- hurling handfuls of foam
across these breakwater stones.
She cannot contend with this sea's
snarling, savage mass
of white, frothing energy.

This Lucia di Lammermore

of the waves cannot be controlled

                           

 

Reviews

[J]

I had no idea you were referencing an opera until I looked it up at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lucia_di_Lammermoor, and to find out it was about a feud between two families makes sense when used as an analogy for a tempest (and a tempestuous woman) like you have done.The language you've used is broiling yet tightly controlled, with lots of alliteration making this 'roll'. But on a nitpicky note, I think you could take out a couple of commas here and there--that's if you want to 'loosen it up a bit'; but then, this choppiness is in line with the subject matter, so up to you. But the comma after "demented" really needs to go in my honest opinion. Nice intro poem =) J

[SilentVerses]

Love it, especially love how you can portray so much in so little words, oh how I envy that. Beautiful :)

[Emily B]

I've read this before. I can't imagine why I didn't leave a word or two. I am more amazed at the words this time around. Brevity is the soul of wit, you describe more brilliantly in these lines than other artists do in unwieldy epics. I love this.

[Lionel Braud]

i have to admit i did not get the "Lucia di Lammermore" reference but I ws still able to get the message and contextualize the message of the piece. good use of metaphors.

[Gandré]

your sophisticated poem about the sea is as knowledgeable in the small realities of life and articulate about the power of water as it is about parallel processinig and modern experimentation on its purpose. I like very much

A Lucia di Lammermore of waves,
in wind whipped veil, ====================mmmmh Bravo, a wonderful poem!

[Dj Golden]

Interesting piece. I've never seen the play, but I hear it is good. Lots of angry words really sets the mood, but I agree the title doesn't quite fit. Perhaps "Rage of the Sea"? The poem itself is good though. Excellent work.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Very stunning poem. I hadn't any idea that you were you were referencing an opera until I read ~smokey~ocean~tendrils~ review ... that makes it even more powerful.

my fave lines:

with this sea's snarling,
savage mass tearing itself
like a rabid b***h.

thank you for this unique poem.

[Blackbirdsong]

Wow this is wonderful and perfectly told. I was out in the middle of the Atlantic Ocean last fall on a small boat as we tried to spot humpback whales. It was frigid out there and it early September and those waves tossed us about without mercy. And it was wonderful! There was no way to control it and I didn't want to. I just bounced around like I was riding a really huge horse. (hopefully that makes sense)

This whole section here just knocked me out cold -

"savage mass tearing itself
like a rabid b***h.
A Lucia di Lammermore of waves,
in wind whipped veil,
this damned, demented bride
cannot be controlled."

Lucia di Lammermore, what a great metaphor for the sea. And that opera is known for its high notes so high sea is perfect there too.

take care :)

[W.k.kortas]

I found the stanza breaks a little odd, and perhaps they could be done away with, but that's a minor complaint with an impressive poem. Wonderful imagery and metaphor, nice use of assonance and alliteration. A lot of punch in a small package.

[Yira Simone]

I love the ocean. This poem made me think back on my days standing or sitting on the beach watching the dynamics of the water and the wind. Two powerful forces, that can barely contain themselves, much less the other. That is what I get from your poem. Both forces of nature, strong and beautiful in their own right, yet untamed and bound to fight over control. I loved the imagery you used...it was realistic. I also enjoyed the way you painted the picture of the two as if they were women...highly emotional, and bound to be unpredictable, even better, a woman scorned. Again, I think you did a wonderful job writing this.-Catrina

[V. Lucien Maier]

well written. great description of the sea.