Santa's Revolution

Either, said the man in the scarlet suit,
I can spend my time making presents

 

no one needs, not even, the little children:
or I can make one giant gift to the world

 

and make war on the White House.
Remembering the words of other bearded men,

 

he prepared his helpers for a socialist revolution.
In the House a man looked up, bemused,

 

at the news that the turkeys
had made a break for the woods.

 

The President continued to read
how the Grinch Stole Christmas

 

and the dispossessed rose in their thousands -
the reindeer trampled the golden eagle

 

and the only stars that rose that night
were not attached to stripes.

Author's Note

According to my poetry tutor this could be a lot funnier. It needs a few one-liners going for the humour. As it stands it half goes for the humour but it could be a lot funnier. Please tell me what you like and what 's weak and if anyone has any idea in the zany humour department I'd be happy to hear any suggestions. I have also changed the structure to couplets. Do you think these work?

Reviews

[Cdnsurfer]

Hey Vanessa. Nice to see a new piece by you up here, since you've been gone so long. I like the sarcasm, which makes a nice-light snack for the Holiday Season, and with a bit of mash potatoes and turkey, completes the meal. Ha ha! Oh, Santa's got a plan; it's going to be a starry, starry Christmas this year! What fun, indeed! Loved it. Rob

[Ken Simm.]

I love the rise of the Turkey prolatariat. The Turkey's fight back and give George wubbleyu something not to be thankful for. A seasonal wish for multiraced Christmas Wonderful. What will we call it instead as it cannot be Christ- mas. and of course we must be PC, not!.
A lovely, lovely, very funny read with a real message. Ken.

[Blackbirdsong]

LMAO I sincerely hope that you had as much fun writing this as I had reading it. Now if only they would make this into a Christmas special; animated of course. I love the references to various Christmas books, etc. mixed in with politics.

[Blue Bard]

Powerful voice this, not afraid of ideals. I love the subversiveness of the image and the ending is just astonishing. A wonderful poem.

[PianoandPage]

ha. this is great originality. i love it when icons are explored and mixed with beliefs, ideals, and contrasting themes.

the idea of santa giving us the greatest gift is right on. i love it.