Butterfly Sky

 

 

 

Closing wings of blue
morpho,
coloured skies tinged angel white,
flap, briefly, at end  of day
before
dark clouds conceal you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

Perhaps we should all start thinking of making a Chofu anthology and if we do what you've done here and in the previous poem, must certainly be highlighted as some of the best.

Another gorgeous chofu. I'm almost speechless. siiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiigh

Notice I said, "almost."

take care :)

[Jacquie]

Vanessa, I liked this short poem immensly, because it evoked in me feelings of peace. I don't know if that was your objective, but it made me feel warm. Good job.

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

These styles of poetry are difficult to write well. Any writer can follow syllabic meter to come up with something to say in form. The best part is when inside the form something is said poeticly... as you have done here. In short phrases you have said a lot and well, IMHO. I like the imagery stated.

Cheers!
Doc.
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[Gandré]

this is sweet and stimulating! wonderful chofu. I hope you win! I like the lines in the middle "coloured skies tinged angel white,
flutter, brief, at end of day " -----best. good luck.

[Alex Tang]

There's not a single word in this poem that doesn't carry some beautiful imagery or strong meaning. Very well written, you managed to convey a strong image with a very brief piece of writing. Excellent excellent excellent.

[The Spaniard]

I absolutely love poems that are short but say so much. The picture in my head is breathtaking and i have your words to thank for it.

[Randall]

Very descriptive, beautiful poem. A job well done.

[Armon Badill]

beautiful, vivid, excellent

[You Don't Know Me]

James shared this with me. This painted such a beautiful, vivid picture.

[Ken Simm.]

The quantam effect of a butteflies wings, a lovely poem. Regards Ken.

[Cdnsurfer]

This is subtle, and the feel is soft and reflective, watching with wonder the miracle of sunset grey. Very nice. I think I like this Chofu thing. Just enough words to paint a watercolour sketch. Nice indeed. ;-)