I Can't Love You

 

Always on my mind

I want you

But I hesitate

I’ve never been with you

I care what people think

 

I love who you are

I knew you right away

It was as fluid as soda

Sipped on a sunny day

 

I know this won’t work

You know it, too

I love who you are

But I would leave you

 

I’m too f*****g scared

I’ve never breathed this air

 

Your cheek as smooth as mine

As I kiss you a second time

 

You don’t move your hands

I don’t feel the pressure

Your mind is in your heart

I don’t feel the pressure.

 

But I won’t let go

I won’t let people know.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

This piece puts to images in my mind. One of someone taking a hit off of a water bong, and the other of the first fearful steps in a new relationship. I really liked the descriptiveness in the stanzas, they gave us a glimpse while making us form our own more solid images of what's going on.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[Drew Peterson]

very detail. shows alot of emotion.

[Oblivion]

Very descriptive of your experience. Do you jump or stay quite?

[p.kuhl]

this is interesting...from true life?

[Reaching for the clouds]

This is really good. It makes your readers think and we can all identify with it. This is an original and interesting write too.....

[Distant horizons]

beautiful write