Your beautiful words let me hear the crackle, feel the warmth and smell the woodsmoke of the campfire. Trees "drenched in dripping diamonds of moonlight"- lovely alliteration and imagery...such precious moments in time with your husband shared. Thank you so much for sharing them with us!
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7 Years Ago
Annette Pisano Higley,
How nice to make your aquaintance. Yes, your words are pretty much in.. read moreAnnette Pisano Higley,
How nice to make your aquaintance. Yes, your words are pretty much in agreement of this poem's reality. How fun and rewarding as youv'e written above: "hear the crackle, feel the warmth and smell the wood smoke of the campfire." all bathed in moonlight luminous. Thank you for coming here to read someone new and thankful you have.
Kathy
A pleasure to meet you as well Kathy. You are very welcome. I loved your excellent, magical poem!
7 Years Ago
Annette it was so fun to say Hi and read a poem of yours. I wish us both more enjoyment in writing a.. read moreAnnette it was so fun to say Hi and read a poem of yours. I wish us both more enjoyment in writing and mutual happy understanding within our words.
Blessings.
7 Years Ago
I appreciate your time and lovely review Kathy. I join you in that sweet wish. Blessings back to you.. read moreI appreciate your time and lovely review Kathy. I join you in that sweet wish. Blessings back to you!
Superb descriptions of night dew glistening in the moonlight brought back memories of my camping days. "Togetherness" in the midst of nature becomes a new experience when away from the bustle and pressures of modern living.
Thanks Kathy - you nearly made me feel young again.:-)
Norman
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Norman223,
Your review really warmed my spirit and encouraged. You know of what your share; i.. read moreNorman223,
Your review really warmed my spirit and encouraged. You know of what your share; it is really obvious and so picturesque. "Night dew glistening in the moon light." Your descriptive skills are great. Your ability to bring the feeling of what you speak makes me feel "young."
Blessings to you.
Kathy
Ah, man makes fire. The one good thing we're good at. This of course is to make sure you put the tent up. Make the meal. Find the sleeping bags.
Don't you just love camping. The great outdoors of love. Just be a minute love. Searching for logs. You look after Timothy now, Kathy. Enjoy the moonlight.
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Paul Bell,
What fun you have given me! Your review is a story encapsulated. Yes it is my priv.. read morePaul Bell,
What fun you have given me! Your review is a story encapsulated. Yes it is my priveledge to be blessed with my timothy; a really special guy. He loves me and that is a miracle.Back to your review; I appreciate being reminded of what we gain in visiting wonderful outdoor rooms each time we camp.
Bless you and your thoughtful words......
Kathy
No nearer place to be with the Almighty, than neath a clear, moonlit night sky, surrounded by natural fauna & flora and with the one you love!
A sweetly penned, picturesque delight, wonderful imagery and endearingly atmospheric!
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Tom,
Your last line of a fun review is so fun; "sweetly penned, picturesquedelight, wonderful.. read moreTom,
Your last line of a fun review is so fun; "sweetly penned, picturesquedelight, wonderful imagery and endearingly atmospheric!" Maybe if it's written out I will really soak up the words.......
thanks for reading and reviewing.
Kathy
Kathy, this poem is vividly imaginative with an exuberance that glides through every word. Like diamonds, moonlight, and fire, this poem shines sooo brilliantly that it's sure to set any reader aglow with passion. Too, I'm impressed by the title and how it sets the perfect mood for the poem.
This poem bleeds with fiery desire, but also holds a gentle ambience in its expression. Though I had some quibbles with wording, punctuation, phrasing etc. (I'll elaborate on this more if you'd like), the "whole" of this poem truly struck me. Brilliantly penned!
William Liston,
Your thoughts regarding the feeling of this one really are good and thanks. I.. read moreWilliam Liston,
Your thoughts regarding the feeling of this one really are good and thanks. It does have some work that could be done on it still here and there. Sometimes changing to much can rob its authenticity but if you'd like to make some recomendations, I'm cool with that.
Thanks for thinking and pondering the meaning behind this little tale. It's so nice when people go to the trouble to review.
Blessings to you.
Kathy
7 Years Ago
It wasn't any "trouble" Kathy, but a distinct pleasure to share my enjoyment. Now, in regards to a c.. read moreIt wasn't any "trouble" Kathy, but a distinct pleasure to share my enjoyment. Now, in regards to a couple of suggestions:
I felt the the phrase "glowing pretty" in line six was unnecessary. The word "pretty" has a farily weak connotation compared to the vivid imagination in the rest of the poem, and therefore adds little to the overall effect. I suggest omitting that phrase. The same goes for "simply amazed" in line 15 and "and amazing" in line 11.
A few tweaks in punctuation (changes in parenthesis)
- "Every leaf, branch(,) and twig
- "Luminescent Moon’s power(.)
- "Late and later(,) all becomes hushed"
- "Husband Timothy off to sleep(,) this night"
- "Thank you Lord(,) for your precious moon
A few tweaks in wording
- "Basking in silver bright shining is my privilege."
- "your precious moon rules the night"
Of course, the above is mostly personal opinion, so just take heed to whatever resonates wiht you. Have fun!
7 Years Ago
I will look and think. Thanks so much for your concern and efforts to make someone else's writing li.. read moreI will look and think. Thanks so much for your concern and efforts to make someone else's writing life a little better and for a little joyfulness. that goes a long way in this world and of course with me.
I've often sat late into the evening watching the fires embers fade away. Your poem built a very vivid picture of peace and contentment. There is love there too. I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Oh, wonderful! I love when others have similar experiences and apply it to what they read. I suppose.. read moreOh, wonderful! I love when others have similar experiences and apply it to what they read. I suppose this is what we all do. I just never become bored with hearing others responses. It is so encouraging. I hope you continue to enjoy the night season the way you speak with a campfire or fire pit. It is so good for our souls. Stay inspired kind sir!
Blessings,
Kathy
A wonderful combination of romantic and spiritual art you have created in this poem.
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Thanks much. It seems if the inspiration of nature pulls us it is always possible to find joy in it... read moreThanks much. It seems if the inspiration of nature pulls us it is always possible to find joy in it. "Romantic and Spiritual." Oh I like that!
Blessings to you.
Kathy
Fabulous imagery here in this poem, Kathy: diamonds, glass, living lens, and more...
Nature is beautiful and you've paid her a great homage with this inspired piece. We don't get ice and snow where I live, and this almost had me wishing we had (not really...too cold, man!).
Great that you can revel in nature's beauty, even in the midst of a freeezing winter!
Zugzwang,
Summer's heat is still a reality for you I am sure. I appreciate your take on this .. read moreZugzwang,
Summer's heat is still a reality for you I am sure. I appreciate your take on this poem. I was tickled to see how someone could picture snow, ice and cold from your wonderful review. Last summer my husband were out in trees with a fire pit just enjoying a Saturday night and the full moon was out displaying its power.I appreciate meeting and and being in contact with new people-writers especially from other countries.
Bless you bunches!
Kathy
7 Years Ago
Haha, well it's winter here now so maybe that coloured my interpretation. The poem was and is still.. read moreHaha, well it's winter here now so maybe that coloured my interpretation. The poem was and is still great to read of course!
7 Years Ago
Yup its all about interpretation! This is fun and great. Love it!! Winter where you are; oh my! Summ.. read moreYup its all about interpretation! This is fun and great. Love it!! Winter where you are; oh my! Summer here; hmm.........Bye for now.
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