I agree, being told a story is a great delight, especially when loving the sound of another's voice in particular. It's too bad we seem to have lost the art of verbal storytelling . . . nowadays it seems to be mostly ranting or other drama. Your poem brings back gentle times of sharing . . . good use of bright imagery & the last line is one we all wish we'd written! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Right on barleygirl! This poem actually was inspired by my husband telling me a story. It was specia.. read moreRight on barleygirl! This poem actually was inspired by my husband telling me a story. It was special and it needed to be shared mostly for me to remember and revisit the experience. I suppose that is partly what writing can do. Thank you so much for your lovely thoughts and helpful insights. It' just nice, what can I say!
Blessings,
Kathy
simple joys are truly very special, and here, you describe many of them so very well indeed, my friend... Neville
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Neville Pettitt,
This poem really was the result of my dear husband telling me a story- like .. read moreNeville Pettitt,
This poem really was the result of my dear husband telling me a story- like a dream in words and my adding my own little flourishes.
Thanks bunches,
Kathy
6 Years Ago
bunches much appreciated, bouquets on their way by return... N
I agree, being told a story is a great delight, especially when loving the sound of another's voice in particular. It's too bad we seem to have lost the art of verbal storytelling . . . nowadays it seems to be mostly ranting or other drama. Your poem brings back gentle times of sharing . . . good use of bright imagery & the last line is one we all wish we'd written! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Right on barleygirl! This poem actually was inspired by my husband telling me a story. It was specia.. read moreRight on barleygirl! This poem actually was inspired by my husband telling me a story. It was special and it needed to be shared mostly for me to remember and revisit the experience. I suppose that is partly what writing can do. Thank you so much for your lovely thoughts and helpful insights. It' just nice, what can I say!
Blessings,
Kathy
These lines tell of what really matters. So often we become lost in the rush and bustle of today's material world and forget to count our blessings.
Gentle and wise.
Beccy.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Becky,
The precious times which pass when we are not looking. I agree, the material world do.. read moreBecky,
The precious times which pass when we are not looking. I agree, the material world does not feed the deep places within us."Courn are blessings." Yes!
Kathy
Beautiful and hopeful words dear Kathy.
"we are writing a song together, we sing.
I know we are blessed. Together we cling.
You are my color, refreshing love every day.
Morning Prayer waking; Oh God hold him near."
I loved the above lines. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Hi Coyote,
Just by giving a part of your day and reading-commenting you are a bit of sunshine.. read moreHi Coyote,
Just by giving a part of your day and reading-commenting you are a bit of sunshine to my spirit. This poem was all about the reality of inner reality being made real in the context of a story shared within a life story lived.
Closeness to others: friends, family, spouse, and most of all for me, to God is where I find focus in each part of my life story.
Thanks again for your own kind sharing and input about this part of my poem, it always is so nice to hear from you.
Blessings,
Kathy
7 Years Ago
I have always enjoyed your work and you are welcome dear Kathy.
It is so good to be alive and just be thankful. Sometimes our jars brim over with life's grace! Than.. read moreIt is so good to be alive and just be thankful. Sometimes our jars brim over with life's grace! Thank you for reading and a sweet little review.
......wow. This is grand. Very poetic with some very juicy lines, and the final line puts it over the top! Stanza 2 Line 2 could have an "as" inserted between the two clauses so the musicality flows better (and also it sounds more like a nostalgic reminder rather than a reminder to the forgetful). A similar note to Stanza 4 Line 3 (but rather than add, the musicality of the poem would flow much smoother were "ev'ry" to become "each"). This is otherwise fantastic! Well done! (p.s. "moments bowl" needs an apostrophe to clarify what that means) :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
emipoemi,
Thanks for taking the time to think through my poem. It is appreciated. I will just.. read moreemipoemi,
Thanks for taking the time to think through my poem. It is appreciated. I will just keep growing and learning.
It is great when people are honest and kind.
Blessings,
Kathy
'are my color, refreshing love every day _ Morning Prayer waking; Oh God hold him near.'
Life is full of good and bad, sad and glad.. but to have true, loyal love at any and all times, makes life glow. And that is what your words do, Kathy, they glow with love given and love shared. Beautifully said.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Hi Emma,
I'm getting back to you later then I would of liked Please forgive me.
I pray.. read moreHi Emma,
I'm getting back to you later then I would of liked Please forgive me.
I pray that you continue to be a blessing. We are here for just a little while. I like what you said about glow. Warmth is the need we all have. Share our shining warmth.
God bless, and thank you so much for reading and sharing your insights.
Kathy
i hope i could someday make a poem about love as beautiful as this..you are very blessed.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
The fact that you hope for something is the beginning to anything. I love that you read this poem as.. read moreThe fact that you hope for something is the beginning to anything. I love that you read this poem as it is very dear to me. I also believe that you have every bit of ability to do anything you set your mind to. Thank you so much for coming by and reading this. It is so wonderful to hear from you and to read your input and opinion.
I wish you every blessing!
Kathy
I enjoyed your idea of sharing a story in a real sense with your husband, listening to him read and tell you a story; while also understanding that together you are writing your own story of a lifetime.
In this day and fast paced age where love is used and abused and discarded on a whim, these moments of which you have written are becoming rarer with every passing year. Embrace what you share. Keep your story going. For others are not so blessed with the kind of love you have.
A very nice write. Simple but very heartfelt and tender.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thanks Doodley,
I am grateful for my husband; no doubt about it. He actually makes up stories.. read moreThanks Doodley,
I am grateful for my husband; no doubt about it. He actually makes up stories sometimes and just narrates from himself. The images in Story's Jar were actually part of this night's narrative he imparted to my tired soul.
You are so right; so many are lonely. We all can try to love others and be aware.
I appreciate your coming by and giving honest and thoughtful insight.
Bless you.
Kathy
Everything in and about me has become materiel to ponder, analyze and find meaning and beauty. This life journey is all about revealing lessons many times hidden until dug up and planted then finding .. more..