Ms. Madam

My first attempt at a piece in English and French.

She wears her pearls around her neck,

The diamonds on her fingers,

 

Ms. Madam.

 

Everyday a routine,

Never changing,

 

Putting on her evening gown

Making up her face.

 

The image in the mirror is not what it once was

 Elle est mme. immobile Madame.

 

Her fingers twisted with arthritis,

The lines across her face.

 

The beauty fading through the mirror,

Not fading in Ms. Madam’s eyes

                   

Pour l'amour de Ms. Madam

la volonté ne se fanent jamais

 

She lives her life in a dream  

Wearing her pearls and her diamonds

Dressing in her gown,

Waiting for her prince

Making up her face,

Sitting on her couch

sipping son champagne

 

Semblables de Madame de mme. vivront dessus

Ms. Madam

Rêve rêveur de l'OH

Author's Note

You can translate on Babel fish

Reviews

[Bubo]

Have to check abit of the french, but what a stunning write.............to become old but hold
on to all the memories and carry on waiting and dressing for that prince......seeing herself
as beautiful and vibrant like a movie star..........wondering how it is she still waits.........

The beauty fading through the mirror,

Not fading in Ms. Madam's eyes


Maybe thats not such a bad thing.........to still see the young person in the mirror while around
you the world grows old. Lovely write.

[kublakhan27]

I can't put my finger on why, but the French element just seems to belong in this piece...it's always a risky venture mixing languages within a poem, and any other language probably wouldn't work as well, but the French just brings this character to life...so all in all, this is a very vivid character study and a sophisticated piece of poetry :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Yes, I agree the french elements do work. I did try a piece with some Italian and it wasn't the same. This piece I really fiddled with, and was really an experiment. I sent you this piece because on chance this was the one that got published.... Why I am not sure. Not one of my favorite pieces. And now looking back on it, it could really use some work within the formatting. But alas! Thank you for your kind words :)

[kublakhan27]

It must be human nature for artists to want their most heartfelt work to be the best loved by others...for whatever reason, that's never been the case for any writer/musician/etc. I'm familiar with...I was depressed after the last thing I wrote cuz I thought it was so bad, but the feedback I got for it was shockingly positive, event though I still don't feel all that great about it :P But at the same time, it gives me hope that I'm reaching out to people/audiences I never thought I had...turning negative feelings into positive ones is hardly my strength, but for the sake of maintaining whatever it is about my writing that others like, I try my best not to lose sight of that philosophy, even though it's easier said than done at times lol :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

This is very true and I could not have said it better myself. Did I review your last piece? Sorry with being away, I know I have reviewed some of your pieces that were in my library if not send it to me :)! I tend to loose track... But with my favorite writers I tend to keep up with more such as you and Maryanne. :) But you do have such a strength in writing and also such a diversity it is amazing! Something I wish I could have more of :)

[kublakhan27]

:) It's okay, I lose track myself, but you're certainly one of my most active followers in terms of feedback, and I try to offer as much feedback in return as I can, not simply as a means of evening things up, but because you're one of my favourites on here as well, so I naturally want to offer as much feedback as I can anyway :)

You sell yourself short when it comes to diversity...you've taken a lot of chances in your work that I've never really tried...I tend to stick to my formula for the most part, so I may have achieved a level of diversity within that formula, but you're still much more willing to take risks than I am lol :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Awe Thanks! That's how I feel too. I just like reading your writing, that's why i keep up with you :) And thanks about the diversity - I just may not see it, because it's me! lol.

[kublakhan27]

:) Haha yeah it may be harder for you to notice within your own work :)

[MoriartyMesa]

This was something that made my mind jump to 1916 Paris, or maybe a Cat House on the Mississippi River. The images speak as loud as church bells.

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Thank you - That is exactly what I was going for!

[Celtic Cat]

lol...sure...give us homework!!! lol I really do like this piece....it makes me really feel bad for poor Ms. Madam....although in her denial I'm sure she wouldn't welcome my pity. Great write...I like the French in it...even though I didn't do my homework. Nothing personal...haven't done my homework for class yet either!!

[J. Hampton]

Kates ...

I don't know a word of French...I always thought it sexy when spoken
what I do understand of this...it reminds me a tad of the old lady doing the narrative on " the Titanic " Gloria...something or another

nice

Blesssssssss

[Kara Emily Krantz]

i'm too lazy to translate, so i'm going to use context to decipher the meaning... :)

i don't know french, so that doesn't help me. but i know poetry, lol... and this flowed wonderfully, and i really liked the images. and the areas where you placed the lines in french were placed really well :)

nice job!... maybe i'll come back and translate when i'm more awake :P

[__Flaw__]

I imagine her in her youth, going through her routine...her glamour dazzling others, while they carve for her and she waits for her prince to come...and her wait takes longer than imaginable. Sun setting in the window, reflecting darkness descending, and her existence vanishing.
Hmm...no i am not giving it a sadistic touch...just a thought. It was a good effort and babelfish did the trick. Cheers :)

[Dezaraye]

This is a wonderful piece. I love the contrast of her younger years and the older years and that she keeps young at heart. Wearing the pearls and make-up with the gowns ... stunning.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Yes ... the English/French mix not only creates a poetic atmosphere, but also strengthens imagery of both scene and main character (Ms. Madam). Her denial of aging and the reality of her surroundings are beautifully intertwined, making this an excellent write.

'Certains ne voient que ce qu'il veut voir!'

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Robert Luna]

I do believe any truly creative being has something that rest at the very core of their being that drives them and if they do not listen it would eventually cause them to go mad. You seem to listen to this part of yourself wonderfully some would call it a muse but I call it survival. We write because we have to release things from ourselves that is such powerful driving force if we did not I am not exactly sure what might end up happening. I say cheers to listening to yours and never become silent that in itself is worst than death.


Well Done!!!!!