The Pardon

 

 The Pardon

 

 

 

 

As I look beyond the bars they have made for me,

I wonder what it's like,

On the outside.

 

What would I do,

If I were to make myself free?

 

Could those who keep me here bring me back?

 

Once free from my cell,

Would I become enlightened,

As my eyes adjusted to the world outside my cell?

Would I create things

Of beauty or of the intellect?

 

Or in my freedom,

Would I become a madman,

Causing only confusion and despair?

 

Once free from my cell,

would I ever look back

And miss the safety there?

Reviews

[The Flawed]

This Is a great piece, so true, and so honest.
This to me is about a person evaluating his/her life after some time into a relationship / marriage and realizing how much they have sacrificed, how much they have given up and how much they have had to change for this relationship, and wondering if it has been worth it, if not should they do something about it? Or is too late?
But hay, what do I know?
Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

If we see the truth. We won't allow anyone to lock us up again. Poem is amazing. The questions are necessary in a life. We must run free for a while. Life and work will one day lock us in. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Steph]

I really like the lines "Or in my freedom,/Would I become a madman,/Causing only confusion and despair?"
I think it reveals the uncertainty of things. And that you have to weigh your options before you make a desicion. The next stanza kind of solidified that in the essence that one doesn't know what is going to happen, and that one should choose carefully in life.
I also think that this really shows a person's inner physche in a way. Where things are just one huge internalized debate.
I really liked the poem though, good job :D

[Edgar A Stonehill]

An interesting concept and subject. It definitely plays off Plato's Cave (which I find myself writing about on several occasions).

But truthfully, it is difficult to believe that this is language used by a prisoner.

[Wildecat]

I think it flows nicely. A very good read, thanks for sharing your poem.