It feels like I've been lost in a decade's sleep Lying, crying, in a hopeless heap Plagued by darkness, and constant pain Lonely heart, full of disdain Then came you, out of the blue Showing me colors I never knew Sprinkling sunshine on my guarded soul Giving me back light, others had stole Now, life is the way it's supposed to be And I've packed away the melancholy. ~kjl
Seeing good days after coming out of our pain and getting back our light after a bad period is no less than a rebirth.
A well written write. I loved your rhyming both the internal and the end rhyming.
Then came you, out of the blue
Showing the colours I never knew. Beautifully written!
Thanks for sharing.
Keep sharing...
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Bala. You're right about the struggle to come back after a period of pain and st.. read moreThank you so much, Bala. You're right about the struggle to come back after a period of pain and struggle. I'm so glad you liked it and that the emotions came through. :) Kassie
First of all, I loved your AABB rhyme scheme, and how smoothly it flowed throughout the poem... Your poem is itself speaks of rebirth, rebirth from darkness, from pain, from hardships of life... I have always believed in the theory of life that life always gives us an opportunity to rise up from the darkness and the ones who hold faith in their heart can surely rise again... You did an awesome job to speak of the aliveness after being under darkness for long time... An amazing work...
Dhiman,
Thank you so much for taking the time to review my poem. You really know your stuff!.. read moreDhiman,
Thank you so much for taking the time to review my poem. You really know your stuff! This particular poem speaks of the endless possibilities that life may bring, as long as we choose not to give up. I really appreciate your words and am happy to be on this site, sharing my work. Thank you for the incredible welcome! :) Kassie
8 Years Ago
Very true kassie, life is full of enormous possibilities and thousands of doors are waiting for us t.. read moreVery true kassie, life is full of enormous possibilities and thousands of doors are waiting for us to be opened, we just have to keep on trying until the right door opens up... Life always gives us back what we give to it wholeheartedly... Very welcome to the cafe my frnd...
8 Years Ago
Perfectly stated. Many thanks again for the warm welcome :)
Seeing good days after coming out of our pain and getting back our light after a bad period is no less than a rebirth.
A well written write. I loved your rhyming both the internal and the end rhyming.
Then came you, out of the blue
Showing the colours I never knew. Beautifully written!
Thanks for sharing.
Keep sharing...
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Bala. You're right about the struggle to come back after a period of pain and st.. read moreThank you so much, Bala. You're right about the struggle to come back after a period of pain and struggle. I'm so glad you liked it and that the emotions came through. :) Kassie
Just an old soul who is obsessed with the magic and power of words..I write because I'm alive, and I'm alive because I write. Thanks for reading.. more..