The Girl in the Mirror

"The mirror speaks the truth but look closely or you just might miss it." She disappears from beside me.

The Girl in the Mirror
By: Kasey Christopher


As I'm sprinting through an open field of grass, with the wind blowing my long, dark brown, bouncy hair and my long, light green dress that flows in the back of me.

I start to think to myself; Why am I running? What and who am I running from? What's wrong with me? Why am I acting this way? What am I worrying about?

While I'm dashing more faster through the open field, these thoughts in my head begins to come rather quickly to me.

Why am I still rushing? Why am I here? Who am I? Am I a bad person? Why am I so lonely? What am I afraid of? What and who am I still running from? Why am I still acting like this way? What's wrong with me? Am I happy? When is this going to end?

Those were the questions rushing through my head as I'm still speeding. It was than when I had realized that there's a long, clear mirror on the left side of me.

Somehow, I hear this angelic but stern voice, "Stop running, you are going nowhere," I instantly stop and she appears beside me looking at the mirror. It's the familiar blonde hair woman that I've been seeing here lately.

She's absolutely right about one thing that I'm going nowhere from running. Why is she here? Why am I here? Why are we both here?

I look at my reflection in the mirror, but this mirror holds so much more then just my reflection. It holds my perfections, my flaws, my mistakes, my glories, my emotions, my enemies, my monsters, and my battles but most importantly it holds everything that makes me a human.

Are my eyes deceiving me? How could this be? How is this happening? Why is this happening to me? What's wrong with her showing me this?

The perfections and flaws that lies on my bare skin, these mistakes that I make from past to present, the glories that I have accomplish from time to time, these emotions that builds up over the years, the enemies that I have to face, my monsters inside of me from believing my childhood nightmares, and the battles from within myself and the people who face me as their enemy all on each section of this long piece of mirror.

"This mirror speaks the truth but look closely or you just might miss it." She disappears from beside me.

To Be Continue…….

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think about this? If you want more? I did some editing and just tell me what you think now.

Reviews

[CrumbsInMyBed]

I look forward to seeing where you go with this. I did feel like she asked a lot of questions and that maybe you could've described more on what was causing her to question so much instead of just asking the questions. (Hmmm, does that make sense? Lol) I do really enjoy the concept. I am curious to find out where the things she sees in the mirror leads her.

[LastMonth]

There's a few bumps.
Nothing major, really.

You wrote, 'As I'm running -more- -faster-' . There's really no need for both more, and faster. Both serve to enhance the 'Fast'.

Other then that, the word Run, Running appears eleven times in your writing. It's a tad too much. Try replacing some with things that are different,

Rushing, Dashing, Sprinting, Jogging, Escaping etc...

The meaning behind your story is deep and painful.
An ocean of doubts, and hesitations that really break up a person's resolve.
Keep on writing, I have no doubt you'll get much better.

I hope my review was helpful.

[Kasey M.C.]

Thank you for that great tip and I never thought of using those other words for running. Thank you!

[Catheline kole]

i think that this is something like somebody who is tired of life, maybe due to some bad reasons, and has lost the courage to stand up to the further circumstances is running away from the life. running into the infinite, without bothering about anything, just running with a hope still inside that she might get to place where things will be entirely different.
i would like to know what happens later on and where that girl ends up going.

[Kasey M.C.]

Thank you for reading this. She's in an entirely different place alright. What do you think would happen just by reading the ending?

[Catheline kole]

maybe that mirror showed her the way when she really 'looked closely' as the reflection had said to her. maybe she understood that the things from which she was running away from were nothing but her own strength and she must face them to be strong and she ran back from where she left to continue the struggle of her life.

[Catheline kole]

you have described it so well

[Kasey M.C.]

Thank you and that's one of putting it.

[Catheline kole]

will you continue it further?

[Kasey M.C.]

Yes I will!

[Catheline kole]

i will read it. :)

[Kasey M.C.]

Good :)!!!!