The Girl in the Mirror

"The mirror speaks the truth but look closely or you just might miss it." She disappears from beside me.

The Girl in the Mirror
By: Kasey Christopher


As I'm sprinting through an open field of grass, with the wind blowing my long, dark brown, bouncy hair and my long, light green dress that flows in the back of me.

I start to think to myself; Why am I running? What and who am I running from? What's wrong with me? Why am I acting this way? What am I worrying about?

While I'm dashing more faster through the open field, these thoughts in my head begins to come rather quickly to me.

Why am I still rushing? Why am I here? Who am I? Am I a bad person? Why am I so lonely? What am I afraid of? What and who am I still running from? Why am I still acting like this way? What's wrong with me? Am I happy? When is this going to end?

Those were the questions rushing through my head as I'm still speeding. It was than when I had realized that there's a long, clear mirror on the left side of me.

Somehow, I hear this angelic but stern voice, "Stop running, you are going nowhere," I instantly stop and she appears beside me looking at the mirror. It's the familiar blonde hair woman that I've been seeing here lately.

She's absolutely right about one thing that I'm going nowhere from running. Why is she here? Why am I here? Why are we both here?

I look at my reflection in the mirror, but this mirror holds so much more then just my reflection. It holds my perfections, my flaws, my mistakes, my glories, my emotions, my enemies, my monsters, and my battles but most importantly it holds everything that makes me a human.

Are my eyes deceiving me? How could this be? How is this happening? Why is this happening to me? What's wrong with her showing me this?

The perfections and flaws that lies on my bare skin, these mistakes that I make from past to present, the glories that I have accomplish from time to time, these emotions that builds up over the years, the enemies that I have to face, my monsters inside of me from believing my childhood nightmares, and the battles from within myself and the people who face me as their enemy all on each section of this long piece of mirror.

"This mirror speaks the truth but look closely or you just might miss it." She disappears from beside me.

To Be Continue…….

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think about this? If you want more? I did some editing and just tell me what you think now.

Reviews

[CrumbsInMyBed]

I look forward to seeing where you go with this. I did feel like she asked a lot of questions and that maybe you could've described more on what was causing her to question so much instead of just asking the questions. (Hmmm, does that make sense? Lol) I do really enjoy the concept. I am curious to find out where the things she sees in the mirror leads her.

[Diane]

Very good. I am looking forward to reading more

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and powerful words. Left a lot for the reader to think about.
"I look at my reflection in the mirror, but this mirror holds so much more then just my reflection. It holds my perfections, my flaws, my mistakes, my glories, my emotions, my enemies, my monsters, and my battles but most importantly it holds everything that makes me a human. "
The above lines. Solid and true. Thank you dear friend for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Ana]

Putting a list of questions made it more interesting, and made me wonder why she was asking them. I thought she was being chased? Does the blonde woman represent her life, like she can't get anywhere running from life? I know that's how I feel, I don't get anywhere running from studying. ...Which is what I should be doing lol but reading is more fun.

[Bra.Kofi]

i felt the most important message which you were trying to put out and i think it is direct and clear. youre doing great

[Leanne Estelle]

I agree that you need to find some synonyms for the word 'run'. I also think exploring other adjectives in the opening of this piece would help the description as you use the word 'long' twice in the first sentence. Just have a little more fun with the adjectives and you'll have a really great piece.

[Shy_muse]

I really enjoyed your story and would like to read more!! I think it would benefit you and your readers to smooth out your punctuation and tense usage a bit. Like "It was than" should be "It was then". Simple mistakes like this take away from the readers concentration and brings them back to reality.... try reading your story backwards sentence by sentence to edit it; it helps smooth things out quite a bit! Great job though!! Keep up the good work!! < 3

[sabine]

I really like the story, the meaning and thought behind it are deep and intriguing. There are a couple times when your descriptions are a little distracting. For example, in the first paragraph you don't necessarily need to describe the character's hair and dress with so much detail at this point in the story, that's something you could add later if you continue on with this story. I feel like it just distracts the reader from what you are trying to get across.

[Molly Anna]

I like the thought behind the words, definitely a good prologue to the rest of your book (or story ;)) I couldn't help but feel that maybe you could have described a more mental anguish in the main character, distress at questions not answered, confusion to why everything is happening...signs of emotion rather than so many questions... But, again, I like what you have going. :)

[zunie frost]

"This mirror speaks the truth but look closely or you just might miss it." She disappears from beside me.
i love this line
and can't wait to read more of it
really great work

[Kasey M.C.]

Thank you and that's my favorite line as well. What do you think would happen next?