TORMENTED MIND

The existance of a tormented mind

Recklessly moving through time

Trying to find peace

Or some sort of release

 

To venture through its fields

May bring terror and dispair

Its many winding roads

Never knowing where they lead

 

Through forrests of twisted vines

and mountains of jagged edges

It holds so much confusion

Its purity ripped away

Raped of its innoscense

A tormented mind

Reviews

[Michael X]

focusing on the image, i felt it to be a powerfully invented, indepth look into the mind tormented
by it's environmental emotions, i love the imagery you chose to employ, this is powerful, and the
flow itself is of a classic nature, and one can really get the feel of what the author is implying in
meaning, in way of defining the title, its metaphorically developed to reflect the thoughts of the
character, which in turn personalizes the experience, there is a certain shade of gray felt in your
words and i believe it's what makes the image stand out. telling, dramatically subtle, very well written.

[JayaMae]

The fine line between brilliance and insanity. This write provokes thought about those tiny little voices we hear everyday...

[Gildamare]

You don't hold on to that rhyme scheme, which I was expecting.

[Donald Olds]

This is so awesome! Great Job!

[Kevin Andros]

I've also noticed our cool pattern of writing your poems. This one, a sonnet, is very well written. Keep this stuff up. ~KA~