TORMENTED MIND

The existance of a tormented mind

Recklessly moving through time

Trying to find peace

Or some sort of release

 

To venture through its fields

May bring terror and dispair

Its many winding roads

Never knowing where they lead

 

Through forrests of twisted vines

and mountains of jagged edges

It holds so much confusion

Its purity ripped away

Raped of its innoscense

A tormented mind

Reviews

[Michael X]

focusing on the image, i felt it to be a powerfully invented, indepth look into the mind tormented
by it's environmental emotions, i love the imagery you chose to employ, this is powerful, and the
flow itself is of a classic nature, and one can really get the feel of what the author is implying in
meaning, in way of defining the title, its metaphorically developed to reflect the thoughts of the
character, which in turn personalizes the experience, there is a certain shade of gray felt in your
words and i believe it's what makes the image stand out. telling, dramatically subtle, very well written.

[Just Manoosh]

This write rings so very true, so much of our pain is spiritual these days. A broken arm can be healed, a broken heart ...... I am not so sure.

Sometimes we are forever splintered.

An excellent expression of someone so lost.
Mx

[James K. Blaylock]

I really loved the first stanza best. Most of our problems nowadays are our own self-made-sorrows.

jkb

[Merancapeman]

Spelling errors aside (existence, it's field, despair, forests, innocence), you give the impression that a tormented mind is indeed a painful place, indicated by the twisting vines and jagged mountains. Interesting piece!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

An intresting piece? Sort of mental abuse....facing the onslaght of someone or at least thats how I read it. A great write Kim!

[Norma J. Jessee]

You must have seen me somewhere today, for you have described my mind to a tee. lol
I really like this poem,This world is so rush rush anymore that I'd be surprised if one person could be found that doesn't have a tormented mind.
Great work.
Thanks for sharing.

[Amor-de-angel]

I too thought it was going to rhyme after the first stanza and had to read it again to see. Still nice write even though it didn't.

[Caitbabie008]

Great write! :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

if this were a fairly decent poem, i'd say the rhyme scheme was thrown off after the first stanza. But being that is was such a wonderfully written piece I barely noticed it and after reading the whole thing it actually flowed quite nicely. I really enjoyed this piece.


Great Write.

[Eustacia]

Liked the last stanza best, the first felt a little too foced with the rhyming, though I'm a big fan of rhyming poems. I loved the first line of the last stanza. You portrayed the workings of a mind really well...the torment never ends, and I liked how you ended this piece with the poem title.