Wishpered

       If I have to tell you what had happened to me, you wouldn't believe me.

Every night after dinner I go for a walk, so as to relax and think about myself. That night  I went out ,as usual . I was wandering around my neighbourhood very calmly. There was a peaceful silence and the moon was incredibly shinning.

       

      When suddenly I heard someone calling my name, "karen, karen". I turned aroud. I thought  it could be  one of my neihgboors. But not, there was nobody there ,but me. I came back to my things.

A block later,the same voice started to call me again, one more time I turned around and again I found nobody. At that point (I must confess)  I was a little bit scared .

     I started thinking crazy things, "what is someone is following me, and then enter into my house?" The fear was controlling me. However the worse part was coming. Out of the blue someone touched my shoulder and wishpered "hey,help me". I was frightened my legs seemed to be stones, I started to run my home as fast as I could.

    When I finally arrived, I pushed the door open . My husband looked at me with surprise and asked me what had happened. I told him my story close to tears. So he told me something curious too.  A few days ago he was parking the car in front of our house and herad someone calling his name, when he turned to see if there was somebody , there weere two hands marked on the window glass.As if someone was trying to touch him

    I'm still scared, could it be that someone is really wanting our help? Perhaps we would work out this question

Author's Note

Please let me know about grammar mistakes and the fluency of the story.

Reviews

[Samantha Tamburello]

I think the general idea of it is really interesting and made me want to keep reading, however I personally would revise for word choice and find better words for things. The only grammatical mistake I saw was the third stanza, worst* instead of worse, but other than that I would keep writing with that creativity! :)

[Righter]

I liked it! It kept my attention. FREAKY. I am by no means an editor, but i believe it could use a litte work grammatically. Thanks alot.

[k.a]

Thanks a lot! I'l pay more attention at word choice :)