Tears

The pain one feels when detached from their love.....

 

Tears flow a natural path,

As I clutch my broken heart,

Your memory haunts me day and night,

With fate it makes me pick a fight,

Who knew that you would die so soon,

And leave me alone, to cry and mourn.

 

 

So now I sleep in empty beds,

Feeling your warmth in satin sheets,

As mirages of your memories,

Sing me every night to sleep.

 

Author's Note

Please point out any faults at all that you see. Notes are also welcome.

Reviews

[Imperfection]

And leave me alone, to cry and mourn.

Very painful.

Great descriptions all through.
The first stanza speaks of the feeling of loss as experienced by the charcter here while the second refers to how he tries to cope with it.

I like how you've woven a beautiful poem by merging these two stanzas.
Thank you for submitting it into the Lonely Contest.

[closed]

flawless.


regards from a friend.


-Dream

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a beautiful poem. It's gentle, soft. Even though
it's sad, there is a calmness I feel, like it's the finality, and now
you can go on with your life. AD

[Mysty Rayn]

So sad yet sweet. Well done.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Beautiful!! Actually beautifully sad! :(
I'm sure than each and every word in this poem came right from heart and that's why it is so much emotional!
n yeah! I know how much pain does a heartbreak gives and your writing delivers the same emotions and that too in such a beautiful way!
I loved the first stanza more..as it talks about loneliness and all the sorrow of the character...
Beautifully written!