Let's not pretend

I'm a little rusty.

Throwing more black and whites pictures into the flame

Ashes brushing against my cheek, drying away the tears

Pointing another finger, looking for someone to blame

Burning all memories, hoping for the pain to disappear

 

Let’s not pretend you’re alive tonight

It will only bring pain once more

Let’s not pretend that you were right

When you walked out the door

 

Now, I can live without your smile

It may leave me a mess

I can live in denial

And stop the beating in my chest

 

I know you felt alone

Pain surfacing from underneath your skin

Trying to find a home

Which lead to that shot of heroine

 

Let’s not pretend you’re alive tonight

It will only bring pain once more

Let’s not pretend that you were right

When you walked out the door

 

 

I wish I can go back to the start

Where the problems were born

The time he took your heart

And gave it back torn

 

Afterwards, when you started to speak

Out of breath as we laid on the floor

And soul too weak

I knew you couldn’t take much more

 

So you left, heading straight for the door

Left me in pain

Still lying on the floor

Ever since, you never been the same

 

So, let’s not pretend you’re alive tonight

It will only bring pain once more

Let’s not pretend that you were right

When you walked out the door

 

That night I couldn’t sleep

Thinking about the things he did to you that week

I fell to deep

Limbs still so weak

 

I was never strong

And never right

Was I wrong?

From not stopping you that night

 

Lights starting to dim

Seeing what’s true

Realizing I’ am him

And I did this to you

 

Let’s not pretend you’re alive tonight

It will only add to the flame

Let’s not pretend that I was right

When I’m the one to blame

Reviews

[Chemi]

Very nice, a poem that made me feel the emotion and pulled me in as I kept reading despite it being long. Kudos.

[tk]

though the poem is long, it's not boring. pain and hurt is seen here perfectly. a very emotional piece. i love it!

[Canicus]

I like this. people don't know but this happens more than they think. but I like this poem and yes it would make a good song. keep it up

[Libby McKeown]

I think this would make for a great song. The sincerity and passion is effortless, and gives your work greater depth. Thanks for sharing!

[Hello, Goodbye]

delightful stuff.. the imagery is effective..

[Samantha]

Very pretty. Only a few gramatical errors but very nicley written. It really pulled me in and gave life to the writing.

[better off]

This is amazing, I like this sad write, it's very well written.

[Donovan "Grey Wolf" Go..]

Dam........ thats really good... It almost had me in tears......

[Dareen]

WOW

[Dareen]

Wow. Very nicely written and beautifully emotional. If you would just go over the grammer once or twice it would be literally perfect.