Nothing Left

I see your pain/I see your fear

I see all that you bear/ But I don't care

I see the mask that you wear/ Trying to hide your tear

Hoping nobody sees the pain you share

 

It was lies that I believed

But I've been deceived

 

I see your hate/ In your eyes

But It's just fate/ To tell your lies

You kill you're self and don't realize

 

In your sins you see lust

But all I see Is your disgust

Your tears turn to dust

As your heart goes numb and start to rust

 

Now you're going to waste away

I look away as your body decays

As you turn to ash and go with the day

Reviews

[brittneymarie]

This was good. The rhyming words were like smack right in the face of how you feel. You really got your emotion down and that is great:]

Good job

BrittneyMarie

[Jenna]

Just a little too much rhyming. And in a way it doesnt fit to me for some odd reason.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

the vendicitve heart-torn tribute! Here are some real emotions... or sure feels real! Great work.. thank you for sharing!

[Victoria Harlequin]

The rhyming in this very good.
Great write!

[MagiCrystal]

THIS PIECE OWNS A FEELING OF DEATH , HURT FEELINGS AND ILLUSIONS THAT GOT BROKE.THE PAIN IT'S REAL AND SO I FELT EVERY WORDS AS IF I WAS YOU IN THIS POEM...AMAZING AND SO REAL.. LOVE IT..MAGIC