The Three Antagonists

Moving on is the hardest part.

You put the past behind you,

The start of the mess,

The beginning of all the games, 

All the lies being passed to and from one another.

You put the memories of happiness away,

For if you don't,

You will keep longing for the past;

Want for the better times that are already outlived.

You must move on from hurt, heartbreak, and sadness.

Hurt does not care about your emotions.

When it hits you, you suffer.

Heartbreak does not mind 

The curse words you mutter under your breath.

Nor does it care for your emotions.

Sadness is the worst antagonist of all.

It wants a reaction of tears

Flowing as you convince your heart it's over,

When your brain is waging war with it,

Whispering to you that it'll be okay,

That the fight isn't over just because you struggle.

It's just begun because you finally got the courage to fight back.

Reviews

[HappyTaylor]

I'm in love with this!!

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Courageous..I like it..!!!

[Shelby]

Wow, I just realized you say your fourteen. Is that true??? I've NEVER come across a fourteen year old with such concise style and clear thoughts. I am now in awe of you. Do NOT stop writng. You obviously have a huge talent.

[Shelby]

When your brain is waging war with it,
Whispering to you that it'll be okay,

Thse were my favorite lines. You contrasted the waging of war with the whisper, using the alliteration in a very interesting way. There was a connection and rhythm to these lines, contrasted starkly by the meaning of the words. I loved how you wrote of this emotion, which is a common subject, and often extremely hackneyed and old. You, however, wrote about the process of moving on, a different and refreshing aspect to the usual view of pain and heartache and the "woe is me" attitude. It caught and held me, the eloquence of your diction, the free form parallelling the freedom you must now accept.

You put the memories of happiness away,
For if you don't,
You will keep longing for the past;

This is a not often mention of the pain. So often it is the pain focused, for understandable reasons, but you get the root of the problem. The pain is not about the bad parts, but about the memory of the good ones. You express this beautifully and I am in impressed at your talent. Thank you for allowing me to share my thoughts on this. I enjoyed your work very much.

[Sunflower 20]

i really liked how this took you on a journey of heartbreak, the rollercoaster of emotions that come with it and finally the power to move on. i think you could break it up into stanzas instead of one big chunk of writing. otherwise, well done :)

[GamingGal]

Pros: I love the title. It just draws you in. "The Three Antagonists" I mean, it has this ring to it, this lure that makes me want to read and see just who these Antagonists are. And then you personify emotions! You give them life that reflects what they are, and it works quite well here. My favorite lines would have to be the last seven. They're beautiful.

Cons: Only thing I could really think of is perhaps break it into a couple stanzas. Not really a con, though. More like, a suggestio/something I would do. It'd help counteract those super long lines I suppose.

Overall: I quite enjoyed this. It spoke of emotion, showed them well, and then showed us who they really are. Good wording and good job :)