Someone Else

As selfish as it may sound,

I don't want any other girl

To hug you,

To kiss you,

To love you.

For that would mean

She'd be holding my everything in her arms.

She would kiss those lips that made me fly.

Those lips that told me you loved me,

And that you always would.

Those eyes I were constantly getting lost in

Would be looking at someone else.

Your hands would be holding 

Someone else's face

As you told them you'd never leave.

Just as you did to me.

Reviews

[Sunflower 20]

very nice, the sadness is reflected wonderful. i also really like the flow, it works very nicely :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good one..!!!

[Frankie Nguyen]

I love this. I can remember thinking this so many times. Now I only think that I have him and I never want to let him go. This is beautifully written (:

[Samantha (:]

I really like this poem. Guys suck. Well written, I really like how you said she'd be holding your everything in her arms. When you fall in love with someone, it really does feel like they're your everything.

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

I've been there although my anger was expressed very differently But I can feel the desperation and heartache in this poem like please don't give up on us fantastic write with pure emotion very well done

[zirk]

Really makes me feel the passion and heartache. A very sad poem and yet inspirational because I can sense the undying singularity of your love.

[trainwreck]

Good ending! I feel sorry for your loss reading this. I love that you bring up his old promises and compare them to what is happening now.

[E.M.Oglesbee]

That doesnt sound selfish to me at all, and even though it doesn't directly apply to me because i am a guy, i can very much relate to the feeling and ill bet that almost everyone can on some level, very nicely done :)

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

It is never easy to picture the one you love being held or kissed by another. Good poem!

[GamingGal]

Pros: This poem hits home seeing as I've just gone through this situation with someone I lost. This poem sums up everything I couldn't say. It hurts, but I like when poems get to you, you know? It makes them more personal instead of nothing but words.

Cons: None.

Overall: This poem hurts, but it's good. It takes a good bit for a poem to get to me.