School Uniform

about school uniforms

      If the school considering requiring all students to wear uniform during school, this is not a good idea that all students think. It is because nowadays, teenager want to have their own style and wear whatever they want. They don't want anyone to force them wear the uniform. And they want to give any others students or friends saw their best look, best look can take give other students or friends' attention, they can attract other students by the look or style they wear. So most students will think wear their clothes are better than the school uniform.
First, some of the students think wear their clothes are the habit they they do that everyday. So they won't like to wear the uniform. And most the girls like to wear some clothes that can attract other boys to look at them and their friends will said they are so cool. Then the boys will date them and the girls will feel so happy and have another boyfriend. And in the other way, some of the boys always want to wear their clothes and look so cool to attract other girls, so they can have the other girlfriends. That is one reason they students like to wear their clothes and not uniform.
Second, some of the uniform in other school was so ugly or outdate. It is because the school teacher or principal don't know what the students like or what style do the students want to wear. Every students have their own style and their won't have the same idea as the other students. So the school cannot make a uniform to content all the students. And the other things is the students will think wear the school uniform was so dumb and stupid, and they think that the people in outside will laugh at them or make fun on them.
Third, the students want to be free, they want to have all the freedom. United state is a freedom country, they think they can wear the clothes in their way. It is because uniform maybe is some pressure for the students, they don't want school to force them to wear it. Uniform give the students a uncomfortable feeling, they will feel not comfortable to wear it, and now all teenager like to buy many clothes and wear different everyday. Maybe some students don't want people to know what school they are and if they wear uniform, the other people will know what school they are.
At last, most of the students don't want to wear the school uniform to school, but maybe there are some students they want to wear school uniform. They think that school uniform can make the school become more like a family and every students is fair to each other. But mostly of the students don't want to wear it, it is because, high school is not a middle school already, their mind is already grow up. They are already independence, they have their own right and style to wear the clothes. That's why students can have freedom to wear whatever clothes they want right now in United state of America.
 

Reviews

[Dan Hiland]

Your argument is interesting and thought-out, BUT...

This needs to be rewritten, big time. Not because it sounds like a homework assignment (though it probably is), or the subject matter, but because it is hard to understand. A lot of the sentences are incomplete (missing words, etc.), or contain the wrong words.

If you are serious about writing, you should always go back and reread what you have written- or better yet, have someone else read it back to you. Then you will hear a lot of the errors.

If you are serious about writing, you will want to show off your best writing. It's sort of like wearing a school uniform: you have the freedom to wear what you want, but given the choice, would you wear something attractive, or something that makes you look like a zombie extra from the Walking Dead?

If you are serious about writing, you will use words and sentences that have the greatest impact on the reader.

Thanks for sharing this.