In The Eyes of Repentance

A poem of repentance for mistakes and sins he made on his whole life and take the consequences on his unbearable actions.

The Eyes of Repentance

Those vicious memories kept clashing in,
Inside my mind full of repentance and sin.
No matter how many times I tried to forget,
They only drown me with either pain or regret.

The little candle made a faint glow amidst darkness,
On a cold, forsaken room of hate and resentfulness.
I just missed the warmth, I missed the bliss,
I missed the love and warm tender kiss.

I gazed at the picture frames stacked on the wall,
Staring at an image of a little girl clutching a ball.
Another frame where a maiden stood still,
Beside a man, together in front of a windmill.

I looked around the filthy old house with no sound or life,
And caught a glimpse of an evil bloodstained knife.
Then a sudden tear of guilt cascaded from my eye,
When I remembered a little girl's sharp, grievous cry.

I felt so weak, and my hands began trembling,
"What did I do?" I was questionably muttering.
With a glance of an eye, I lost them two,
Just because of violence, and a fight we've been through...

Author's Note

PLease read the whole poem. Comment and review.

Reviews

[one sky]

Very moving. It's so heartbreaking that in the end the voice realized that he cannot bring back the life lost because of violence.
Repentance. Regret. Those cannot bring what have been lost.

Full of emotion but written beautifully. LI like the rhyming, too. Keep writing, Karl.

[Avinash]

I see a strong connection with some real life incident. But the poetry is intense.

[karl16]

Woo, thanks. I was just happy since I thought my first poem was bad.

[Avinash]

No honest and truthful attempt can ever be bad. Write for yourself being true to urself...everyone will identify with that.

[Stan]

Okay, this is pretty good. It's easy to get into the head of the narrator and understand the regret.

[karl16]

Thanks for the review/comment, stan.

[pupz333]

Wow...this is excellent. See, this is why I wish I could rhyme and not have it sound cheesy because it makes for amazing poems like this one!!

The only thing I would change is "no sound and life" to "no sound or life". Just a thought:)

[karl16]

Yeah. I also doubted that phrase. Haha, thanks

[Ency Bearis]

Poignant and tragic thoughts you had narrated and poetized in remarkable way. Well penned Kabayan.

[karl16]

Thank you sir! I was so glad I thought this poem sucks. Haha