I don't really have a title for this yet

I don't really have a title for this yet

A Poem by karilovekari
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I thought this could be good as a song

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Even though it is hard to realize,
You are special to someone's pair of eyes,
And even when you are in doubt,
There is that someone who is seeking you out, 
And if others can't see your true beauty,
Then move then.

© 2013 karilovekari


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I accidentally put then move then instead of then move on. Srry for the mistake

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Chaos_Collector

10 Years Ago

No worries. I still enjoyed reading it though :)
Certainly could be a good song. Something about the last line bothers me a bit. I feel like it'd sound better if it was "Then move on." That's just me though. Nice song. Perhaps the name Appreciation Of Value, Seeking You, or Special Eyes for a title. Idk, just throwing ideas out there for you :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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karilovekari
karilovekari

Inverness, United Kingdom



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I like singing and writing songs. My favorite song is "Let It All Out" by Miho Fukuhara. My parents are full Japanese but I was born in Scotland thus explaining my appearance vs my accent. more..

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