A MOTHERS DARK SOUND

THE NATIONS OF OUR WORLD WILL DECLARE WAR...ALL THE WILE IGNORING THE PAIN A MOTHER GRIEVES WHEN NEWS OF A SONS DEATH

Who do we turn too, who do we blame
The battlefield sight, of souls killed in vain
The marching and madness, of all countries will
to hurt and destroy, no pause when they kill

what is the root, of humanity lost
when will it stop, and what is the cost
we willingly fight, put our-self in deaths range
for who and for what, when will this change

How many body's, and how many tears
how many nights, of families and fears
a mother who waits, and prays for her son
was he killed by a bomb, or killed by a gun

the people on top, who declare all this war
we'll give you money, the listings they soar
poor and naive, the contract they sign
the recruiter he says, son you'll be fine

you ploy and you plot, a war you declare
leave millions of souls, as they rise through air
This is to all, the nations around
ignoring the cries, a mothers dark sound

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Reviews

[Rob Santana]

What a great write. Sad but true,Lets not forget those that come back to their mothers severly injured or with P.T.S. Good job Layla.

[layla]

Thanks so much! it was a an emotion write! :)

[Mark D]

And you go and prove perfectly that I was right in saying you should not limit yourself to just one style of writing..... this is phenomenal writing!

The whole piece is beautiful and heartfelt but also carries a sort of scathing quality as well, a viscous attack on the bringers of such pain. I love the idea of the mothers pain being the sound that best demonstrates the horror of war, fighting and death.

There is a wee typo in the first line. Change "too" to "to".

You are a bit inconsistent with when you use capitals at the start of sentences and stanzas but that is a minor point.

You really know just how to get a point across! "no pause when they kill" such a short line that says so much. "The listings they soar." This effortlessly paints a picture and tells a lot.

A truly beautiful, thought provoking and clever piece of writing. I loved it.

[layla]

thanks so much Mark. I really enjoyed writing this. Even though I don't know anyone close to me who is enlisted I can only imagine what it would be like to have a loved one in the front lines. I love your feedback! thanks again

[Stanley Wilson]

Wonderfully crafted layla absolutely great poem all of it was immensely beautiful but particularly the last verse thanks for asking me to read this

[layla]

thanks for reading it! no problem. I enjoyed so much a Letter To Micheal!