this is nice and i almost enjoyed the beginning, i think this reads
better as an insight or an essay, but with lack of depth it reads
dreary and kinda boring, and doesnt appeal to me personally,
but thats not to say that others wouldnt like it.
i think if it you took more time and the wording was choice,
i would read the entire story instead of losing interest after the first
few lines. let me know if you revise it.
I respect what you're saying and I understand your frustration...
I believe that your story could have had a lot more impact had you employed metaphors.
As poets our job is to not only say what we feel, but our talent is proven when we're able to cause others to inhabit our emotions.
The majority of the time we never accomplish this by plainly saying how we feel, but simply by pouring those same emotions into a different cup. Doing this will make the difference in the recipient neglecting to grab the cup or finishing what's in it.
Life has been like this from the beginning of time..Running away from it just makes those peoples problems worse..I find visiting the old and the infirmed helps me as much as it does them..I like to go to nursing homes and to the womans abuse shelter..A kind understanding word is what some of them really need,,Can't put your head under a bushel of you will miss out totally on life itself,,God bless..Valentine
We can choose to live in fear from all the horrible happenings in the news or to live reaching out a helping hand. I'd advocate for lending a hand. Despite all the bad, their are still many who are everyday heroes and heroines---and they often don't make the news. Sharon
It is a world that is certainly frought with issues. And I for one have stopped watching the news altogether. I'll read a newspaper here and there because it seems a little less biased. But just as there is bad in the world, there are people out there who care, and who go through each day trying in ways both large and small to make it bearable and maybe a little better for everyone else. Perhaps I'm optomistic with that apprasial...I don't know. But I believe in the (One Act of Random Kindness) philosophy.
I think your story read more like a poem, and you captured the feelings of both helplessness and a hope for the future that you were looking for. And foremost, thank you for the read-request.
Be well and be safe Karen, always,
Mark
The news can be very, very disturbing. I don't ever watch it because, like you said, it's filled with pain and sadness. But, sadly, that's the world we live in. Maybe someday it'll be different, or at least I hope so.
Great write,
~Lauren
Exactly why i don't watch the news. I already know what's in it every day, death crime murder corruption.. the news is just the same old story over and over. Very truthful and poignant piece