World thats not so alike

A small one on world which is not what we think...

What they tell in the world is total belief;
Life is a greatly with the dreams haunted
Am lost with the ones who never wanted.
And what i choose
Is where i dont have any clues.
In this world am i still an introvert?
Living in shallow flooded rift
I am still not one of Gods gift
Rhyming with the joys and guys
Am i totally out of filthy toys
The craftsmens journey,is what he lived
The truth what you want to be is still not so nude

Reviews

[bookworm0812]

This was very well written, though I will admit I don't exactly understand it, which might be good, since I'm thinking about it and trying to figure it out....I don't know, honestly. I liked the word choice, and I liked what it seemed to be saying, though I'm not sure I am interpreting it right, and seeing what exactly you were trying to do. Maybe I just don't know poetry as well as I am thinking. As well, did you mean to put "life is a greatly" in the second line of the poem? That was the only little thing that didn't quite mesh. It made it wordier, but I'm not sure if that was an error, or if that was what you were going for.

[karan kotabagi]

thanx for the review.......am trying to tell poeple that world is not what you think.As far as the second line is concerned i am trying to stress it that life is filled with haunted dreams,and you are also right that it didn't quite mesh but that moment made me fill it in like that.And in the last two lines i want to tell you that,be what you want like the craftsmen has been through his passionate interest and the last line means that the thing what you want is not so nude...it is covered with other fake things....i hope the last two lines explanation made you understand what i want to say in this poem.

[karan kotabagi]

and thanx lot for the time you made for it....:):)

[bookworm0812]

Oh, ok! That makes sense. Sorry, I'm not all that perceptive at times. You're very welcome!