Universal Mind

A mumble of prayer from an atheist who prays for better days.

   The stars will shine brighter
     wherever you may be.
     The land will be darker

   Our minds will stay empty;

Love lost, Such a cost;

   Drifting through infinity,
     Maybe, you're still alive in another reality...

       An ilimited bowl of choices to make;
  I sleep with my eyes open, but im still awake.

The perception of time, got on my mind, keeps me awake at night;

   The stars they trully amuse me
     Through infinity and beyond
     I know we never were alone
   Wherever you may be

Author's Note

Leave your thoughts and opinions. Also, if you see any grammar issue, or misspel let me know, help me improve my english!

Reviews

[emipoemi]

A great homage to a great mind and scientist! You really go beyond the world of realism and dip into the surreal and dream-like to make us think of the world we live in. Your references to Neil Young and Toy Story really add a good punch to this, and are so wonderfully placed, they come right at the points when he as readers need a boost to keep on reading . I absolutely love the singular line stanzas. They are so poetic, they really rock out being one-line stanzas.

Corrections: "Love LOST, such a cost" (that's the reference); "I know we'll never BE alone" OR "I know we never were alone" (If you choose the first, then the last line makes sense, but if you choose the second option, then the last line won't make half as much sense anymore).

- on a poetic note, "with my eyes open" (take out the "wide", for it mars the musicality)

This is overall fantastic! Well done!

[kaoswithak]

I've been leaving some references on my writing, i'm very glad and suprise you got both on this poem! I was going to add "give me things that dont get tossed, but i didnt want to over do it. I wanted the references to be there but to be discreet. Thank you very much on the grammar corretion i'll correct it right away!

[emipoemi]

Nice....references are fun, but you made the right choice not to go overboard. Going overboard tends to ruin poetry. But you're very welcome. It was my pleasure.

[emipoemi]

I just realized I forgot one mistake: "unlimited" not "ilimited"