C11H17NO3

C11H17NO3

A Poem by kaoswithak
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“Curiouser and curiouser!”

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Colors, shapes! They shine bright!
Oh, awake me father from this high delight
What is it?, What can it be?
Such a weird figure, it resembles me!

I fear one day
I fear it more than anyday
I fear that someday
It won’t just be enough

Lost from reality
Away in time
And you’ll ask yourself
Where is my mind?

© 2018 kaoswithak


Author's Note

kaoswithak
Give me your thoughts and opinions. Also, if you see any grammar issue or misspell, let me know, help me improve my english!

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No grammar issues here! The "oh" in Line 3 can be removed (it's not necessary, and the musicality flows better without it). Other than that, this poem is a wonder to behold! It's curious, thought-provoking, and profound with a killer ending. Well done! Much enjoyed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kaoswithak

6 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed! I sometimes use some references especially from songs.
emipoemi

6 Years Ago

using references is good on occasion, but careful of not ruining the musicality, which plays a key r.. read more
kaoswithak

6 Years Ago

Never thought of it in that way, i usually see it more as a story. Nice point of view!



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No grammar issues here! The "oh" in Line 3 can be removed (it's not necessary, and the musicality flows better without it). Other than that, this poem is a wonder to behold! It's curious, thought-provoking, and profound with a killer ending. Well done! Much enjoyed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kaoswithak

6 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed! I sometimes use some references especially from songs.
emipoemi

6 Years Ago

using references is good on occasion, but careful of not ruining the musicality, which plays a key r.. read more
kaoswithak

6 Years Ago

Never thought of it in that way, i usually see it more as a story. Nice point of view!

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