Here And There

When Your there

i feel incomplete

dead and worthless

 

though it seems

you think low of your self

and Not well enough

 

You do not see

how it effects those

around you

 

When Your here

 

a feeling like no other

takes over my body,heart and soul

 

i know and you might to

i see no point

in everything

 

looking at reality

as a negitive

 

 

but

today i cried

not for what you did

not for what you didn't

 

for realising

that this feeling will end

maybe not in the near future

maybe not in  50 years

but it will eventually

 

every thing does

 

Author's Note

just get they feeling and stop critisizing and the little things

Reviews

[Legion]

All things come to an end 'tis true. As for the poem, not to sound critical, but for such a deep topic that you have approached, it seems a bit lifeless. It feels as the writing needs more passion. As it stands, it is almost as if you do not believe the pain and misery within. You have a grand idea here to express. Don't sell it short. Hope that makes sense. If you rewrite it and want me to re-review it, let me know. I think this could have the makings of something spectacularly impressive.