Pain of Love

The Pain Of Love

The Pain of Love is

When You Give your heart

or Tell Some One How You Feel

and Get Rejected or Dumped.

It breaks Your Heart,

That Is The Pain Of Love

Giving Your Heart

To Some One you Trust

And Them break it.

Reviews

[Bryce Simonds]

First off, the first line, or I guess the title, "THe Pain Of Love" Maybe you should change that to "The Pain of Love"? Or at least just fix the capital H.
Second, in this line "or Tell SomeOne How You Feel" you had someone as one word. Then in this line "To Some One you Trust" you had it as two words. Sticking to one of those two would make the poem look a little nicer.
Third, in most of the poem you have every word as a capitalized, which is fine. But then at some points like this "When You Give your heart" The "your heart" isn't. Is there a reason for that?

All in all, those are just the mistakes I found.
This was a decent write, you have potential. Keep writing.
Thanks for sharing.
-Bryce

[BleedMyHeartOut]

Very much agreed, and this is one of my favourites , good job :)

[XxBurnXdownXtheXdiscoxX]

I LOVED IT! that dude is just an idiot...GOOD JOB!!

[jawshgurl]

ok my lil sis is real good now that i read her poems and she has my talent so back off and as to u lil sis keep up the good poems love u lil one