Pain

The throbbing of one's heart

In its eternal darkness,

its everlasting shadows,

and galloping winds,

casts horror,

and fear,

in one's soul,

one's heart,

one's mind.

Silence surrounds you,

no light, no life, no breath.

It drives you to the edge,

of disaster,

of corruption,

and in the end,

it kills,

it takes,

it ends.

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Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

This poem has an interesting form. You chose your words well each placed meticulously. Well done!

[Mitch Staunton Moore]

Hi David! I really enjoyed reading your poem. It's fast, poweful and intense. More please:)

[E.V. Black]

Wow, how painful. I think this is the perfect representation of pain.

[Poetic-pRiNcEsS]

it pierces though the heart,sucking the life out of you....i felt the pain...gud work

[Cool Handless Luke]

Primitive and raw, Straight to the point without overwhelming or complicating matters. You used just the right words to reach the true finality. Very Nice.

[Shivam Murari]

Amazing poem brother. But you actually advertised your poem to get 327 views?

[Rachelle]

An amazing poem. The ending is particularly breathtaking. "it kills, it takes, it ends."

[Chiradeep Patra]

Amazing poem...

[InsanityWriter]

So powerful and full of impact. Amazing poem.

"it kills,
it takes,
it ends."

[CriticalxxAngel]

This is very powerful and a very great poem. Great Job!