"Time To Wake Up"

You are going to read this, it's only a matter or time. I know it's pathetic to say all of this through writing, but it's the best way for me to do it I guess. I don't know how you feel for sure, but if Im interpretting things right, it doesn't seem like you want to risk it and possibly ruin what we already have. You dont like talking about it and it scares you...It scares me. But if we dont then it is left to the guessing game. I dont want to do that. If what I am saying is right, then please tell me and we can try to not be thinking about it for every second, of every hour, of every day. The only thing in this is that I will do anything before I let you get hurt. You cannot lose me. EVER. You deserve to get whatever you want and if this isnt what you want then please dont feel obligated to make me feel good or anything. I will get through it. If it is what you want then I will do everything in my power to make you happy for every second I'm awake.

 

 

and heres the poem........

 

 

It starts with the look.

Eyes capturing beauty.

Heart racing.

The feeling of anxiety.

That moment where her pure, translucent beauty is captured,

taken in.

Sensations begin moving and its all I can do not to fall over.

Clumsy and pathetic I waltz over,

praying that I can hold a conversation.

Her charm is overwhelming though she has no clue.

 

nothing is like this moment.

 

Pure tranquility as I wrap her in my arms.

Her smile makes its entrance and my heart pauses with time,

allowing me to take it all in.

then as quickely as it began,

we seperate.

 

At home things slowly change.

 

Slowly being taken over by a sickness.

Unable to eat,

unable to sleep,

unable to think.

 

The waiting is being done,

but for how long?

 

How long must I wait before I can wrap you in my arms,

for an eternity.

Be the omnipitant cure to your pain.

laugh all of my laughs with you.

tell you everything on my mind,

fear no longer a factor.

 

Now slowly coming back from my room to reality.

I realize none of that can be...

it may have well been a bad dream...

Author's Note

I may have jst blacked out writing this. No revision. I wanted it to say EXACTLY what was going on//

Reviews

[The Wave]

very nice.

you created some great imagery here. i could see this happening in my head as you described it.
the feelings and emotions come across immensely and its very very relatable to any reader.

revisions help writing, but i understand why u might not want one. i've written a few things where im prob never going to revise because i want the original feeling to be sustained, such as "Mother Dear".

overall, i enjoyed reading this, not to much your intro but all that followed. you have great potential and talent.
good job.