"This Picture of You"

“This Picture of You”

Picture

 

Holding that smile that you stole from me

Happy, young, naive

    My dad

                       My blood

         But dead to me

 

Edges worn

Picture crinkled

Your brown hair, green eyes

Both bringing fury to my life

 

Found this picture

In an old brown box

Rotting in my garage

Sitting there

Glaring at me

I picked it up

Carried it to my room

 

With meaning more to me

Than to the common eye

Symbolizing what I’ve been through

Battles I’ve survived

Now you must suffer

For the mistakes you made

None can be taken back

 

This picture is my shield

My family’s shield

Using it to direct my anger

All onto You

 

You didn’t deserve my mother

Me

Or the air around you

 

18

Unprepared

I was your mistake

 

Your anger was a cataract

Blinding you from reality

Causing damage

Cannot be repaired

Your abusive ways

Caused harm

To those who surrounded you

 

As I entered your path

You made sure

I wouldn’t be able to again

 

My arm had been broken

In eight different places

Because I refused to look

 

You picked her up

Roughly by the throat

Just to watch her suffer

 

She didn’t

          Fight

She didn’t

                        Struggle

She didn’t want to make me

                                    Cry

 

How could you harm

A fragile baby

I was helpless

And Alone

 

How could you harm

The one you loved

She was helpless

And Alone

 

Because you did

We picked up and left

Leaving you helpless

And Alone

 

In a way I thank you

For setting us free

I found my new family

Who loves me

That’s more than I can say about

 

You

 

Reviews

[DanaRegen]

Kameron......................what can I say that was one of the best poems ive ever read. It was so emotional, and I could really picture it. An abusive parent, to young to provide for her baby. Gives up her children, sets them free, gives them a good caring home. Alone is she left, but free are the children. Fantabulous poem!
-Dana :)

[Crossbroken]

I agree with Anad, this is very good. This is very emotional, so much pain and sorrow in this poem. It reminds me of the pain and the physical and mental abuse I've went trough with my father. I almost teared up when I read this, it must've took a lot of strength to write this. Thank your for sharing this, and I'll look forward to reading more from you.

[ShadowHaze]

I don't honestly know what I should say. I mean, it's not bad, it's actually extremely very good. I loved it, but I could feel the pain flowing and pouring out of this poem. You used GREAT imagery!!! That was perfect, but also so sad at the same time. I almost started crying (and that's hard to make me cry because of a piece of writing). My favorite line had been, "Battles I survived'. Perfect way of showing how even though the person in the poem, got through it all, even though he got hurt on the way. I was happy that the ending was good. At least he/she found comfort in the end.

I just hope that this didn't happen to YOU. But then again, this could just be something you saw or heard, that you had stronge feelings over. Great poem though.


--Haze

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LOVE IT. Try to work out your stanzas al ittle ok? :)

[Samantha Grace]

This was wonderfully painful. Amazing imagery!

[justjenn_2u]

Wow! You write with so much emotion of part of your journey in this life. A painful journey but a true test of your strength.

Your format is excellent as well as the verbage you use through entire poem. The flow of this poem is even and conscise, thus making the words easy to understand.

I am impressed!

[AC Cheatwood]

Wow. That' s really all I can say. I feel the pain coming from this. It is pouring out of your poem. Amazing.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

I am torn in sadness over this... the mother not wanting to fight and make her child cry is symbolic of abuse.. the abusive partner using the child as a weapon against the caring other parent.. this is tragic and I am happy it had a good ending... consider getting rid of the pic as it is only symbolic of pain.. I certainly would not want to look at it if I were in the person's shoes who found it and were hurt so deeply by them. Thank you for sharing; it is good to get out emotions even when they are not so good.

[The DuchessPoet]

Very nice!
Excellent job, my talented friend!

The Duchess...