A Man Lying In Vain..

For the first time wrote a poem in just, a few minutes!

A man,
lying in vain,
thinking about stuff,
making him insane,
thinking of,
mistakes and moments,
moments that made him,
engraved in hell,
rubbing his eyes,
scratching his head,
feeling like he's,
stuck in a shell,
worried and tensed,
trying to walk,
through the fence,
a hundred if not,
million thoughts,
roaming in his head,
breathing heavily,
lying on the bed,
thinking about stuff,
making him insane,
a man. . . .
lying in vain. . . .

[photo credit: art-wallpaper.com]

Author's Note

For the first time wrote a poem like this one.. Please review. :)

Reviews

[Greg the Bard]

Great write!

[Priscilla Sayers]

A nice flow that comes from one lying in bed just thinking. Though if you THINK about it, thinking is never quite in vain unless the thought goes nowhere. In this instance it has produced a poem and it is quite good.

[Arielle Ann]

It has an in depth meaning...we often do it ...lying in bed and thinking, lamenting, crying...until anguish makes us so weary we cant think anymore....nice read!

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really nice writing and deep emotions.. Keep it up! Do u read mine to anyone..

[piggy]

Was this about your dog?
Way awesome stuff. I like it.