A Man Lying In Vain..

For the first time wrote a poem in just, a few minutes!

A man,
lying in vain,
thinking about stuff,
making him insane,
thinking of,
mistakes and moments,
moments that made him,
engraved in hell,
rubbing his eyes,
scratching his head,
feeling like he's,
stuck in a shell,
worried and tensed,
trying to walk,
through the fence,
a hundred if not,
million thoughts,
roaming in his head,
breathing heavily,
lying on the bed,
thinking about stuff,
making him insane,
a man. . . .
lying in vain. . . .

[photo credit: art-wallpaper.com]

Author's Note

For the first time wrote a poem like this one.. Please review. :)

Reviews

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

a sad story, but captures the essence of how we tend to all feel from time to time. Nicely done!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a sad place we all find ourselves in from time to time, well done Poet.

[Groovy]

nice read.

[Coyote Poetry]

I know the feeling of this poem. Sometime hard to get up. Seem we have no purpose and reason to get up and become active and alive. I like the artwork and the story in the poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Amila Jay]

superb writing:)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Love the images...good photo...

[Rene Velez]

Cool write...

[Cheng Yew,Chew]

It can be better.

[stars are far]

This was so nice ..Great write ..
keep goin :)