Lonely Soul

When you walk up the stairs,

you will see the emptiness,

pass through the empty hall,

there exists the lonely soul..

Sometimes lying on the bed,

a million thoughts in the head,

lots of feelings, never shown,

that's why its called the lonely soul..

Does not have anyone to share,

broken heart, no one to care,

it may seem under grown,

when you see the lonely soul..

Seldom walk out from the room,

it also has a wish to groom,

often expects someone to call,

to displace the tag. . . . 'The Lonely Soul..'

Reviews

[GridLok]

Not sure if you intended it Kalpit, but their is, to my mind the suggestion of a very effective metaphor in your opening verse. Walking up stairs to the emptiness of the hall, parallels inviting the reader (or perhaps, a certain person) to be aware of and enter, the subject's (your?) lonely emotional interior.

[Daytonight]

Very well done. Keep up the great work!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Lovely write, wise words with truth. Nicely done.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Its very beautiful, Lovely writing... I enjoy whole poem.. Keep it up... God bless you!

[stars are far]

This is so nice ..
well done :)

[Groovy]

Refreshing style... innovative and well crafted

[((Teenage_Poet_Loser))]

very cool =]

[Rene Velez]

"with millions thoughts in the head", don't know if it's an error but it read funny, but a nice write.

[Alewis]

good write... :)