The Unpleasant Reality

I was walking,
walking on the streets,
streets without lights,
with houses on both the sides.

It wasn't raining,
but vapors were stopping,
stopping the Moon,
to sprinkle its shine.

After a while,
Moon spread its shine,
the Clouds went away,
leaving Moon, with his dim light.

I was still walking,
but i was not alone,
you were with me,
the only 'joy' i have known.

We were talking,
we were laughing,
we were happy,
and, we were walking.

Getting closer steadily,
my hand went,
on your waist,
and then suddenly,
your hand too,
caught my waist.

You may call it a wish or greed,
to make the street an endless street.

Without realizing, we started dancing,
gazing into each others' eyes.

To ask you, not to leave my sight,
I was looking forward, to hug you tight.

At that moment, I heard a sound,
its morning, leave the bed right now!!

A tear rolled,
down my cheek,
then i washed the joy,
in the sink.

Started the day, like everyday,
pretentious smile, is the only way.

I am living with the broken dream,
pretending to be happy and tough,
pretending I don't care,
and I don't give a ****.

Author's Note

I know it's not rhyming..

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

This is so sad. . . Man, to wake up from something like that had to tear you apart, if it is a personal expirience. I like the flow of it, and it I don't think rhyming it would have done it justice. It sounds just fine the way it is. The emotions are really strong, and you can feel them clearly. The happiness at first, and the feeling of belonging. Then the despair of waking up. Very powerful. Lovely write.

-Marie-

[Barry S. Maltese]

How sad, yet sweet. To dream in hopes that the dreams come true. To awake another day knowing that you must be strong. I like the imagry, and how well you conveyed your feelings. Nicely done.

[Susie Q]

I like this just the way its written, even without rhyme. Keep writing.

[Amila Jay]

But there is some rhyme. great write:)

[Here here]

Remember poems don't have to rhyme! I love the twist where you wake up. Well written! I would give it a 3 out of 5, just because I feel some parts were unnecessary. Other than that AWESOME :)
"You may call it a wish or greed,
to make the street an endless street" -*Thumbs up*

Esther (P.s. Thanks for the friend request!)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

It did rhyme every once in a while!
And the emotions were expressed well!

[Scoxander]

cool, like it

[Demi Rose]

doesn't have 2 rhyming in order to be good. good poem.

[Jvonne]

Its very good, you managed to describe the dream very well. I found it entertaining. Well done