She was weak

It is the poem emphasising on the male domination in society

She was born

You didn't want a girl at all 

She was 4 and 

Now she looks like a little doll 

She was 10 

Nobody told her about love 

She was 12 

She was learning to light a stove 

She was 15 

You kept her in the walls 

She was 18

In love she falls 

She was 21 

Her choices were not listened 

She was 23 

You gave her to a rich son 

She was 25

 Now in laws had the throne 

She was 26 

 She was already with a kid 

she was 36 

Her boy was now growing splendid 

She was 45 

Her husband complained 

She was 50 

Now a widow crying in pain 

She was 60 

Now her son shouts 

She was 70 

He threw her out 

All life she served everyone 

Her father, her man, her son 

No one shouted but silence did the trick 

But after all she was weak 

If she shouted back that one day 

Her life would have gone a different way

Author's Note

Frustration took the form of words. Please review and rate if you like.

Reviews

[PANDORA]

I really liked how you used progressive age to explain a life that was owned by everybody else but her.

A few suggestions:

She was learning to lit a stove---She was learning to LIGHT a stove

Her choices were not listened--maybe--Her choices were disregarded

He threws her out--He THREW her out

Her life was a going different way--Maybe--Her life would have gone a different way

Hope this helps.

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you for the help dear

[Lydia Shutter]

You have taken us from birth to old age in this poem. Indeed, if she had spoken up for herself, her life might have been very different. It is a shame there are still so many male dominated societies in our world. Well written. Lydi**

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I really dug it. great residual. in context to the poem and its meaning how could I even presume to diminish it with grammatical criticism? it was wonderful to read and i wouldn´t change anything about it.
im an english teacher and not all structure applies to the heart so I appreciate your words. thank you for letting me read.

[Kajal Sharma]

still if any mistake you can help me out

[Sultrysoul]

Wow very strong piece. Full of deep feeling. Very sad... very good piece.

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you so much...i am glad you liked it

[Sultrysoul]

You are most welcome.

[Vikas Sharma]

The message is loud and clear . Stop gender discrimination....

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you vikas...i m glad you liked it

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I liked the style of narration..
In few a lines SHE took birth and died..
The message is very well conveyed..
Well done..!

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you so much jyoti...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome..!

[Surya pradha]

a great depiction of a woman's life. they do so much but are not appreciated for it, i understand your frustration. keep writing!

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you so much

[Michael Stevens]

Quite an excellent poem. I like the way we got to visit her at different stages of her life. And, I could feel the frustration build with each verse!

[Kajal Sharma]

thank you I am glad you like it...

[Michael Stevens]

You're quite welcome!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yes, i like it. Very well written, and unfortunately, it is true. Women are treated like they're slaves. Which is a BIG BLOODY SHAME of society, but not many care, no one cares about the broken, tormented souls. They're all like "Why would i care?" or "What can i do about it?" and that is just WRONG! 100 points.

[Kajal Sharma]

yes that is true and purpose of the poem is to make people care

[Kajal Sharma]

can i submit it in group?

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Sure you can :)

[Terry O'Leary]

What you describe occurs too often... our 'intelligent' race still in its infancy...
nice poem!!